All Comments on 'The Christmas in July Luau'

I love the smelling of pussy, and when the room is reeking of sex. Musky, pungent, and intoxicating pussy odors.

I am out of breath, speechless and spent...

What a hell of a ride and what a mind-boggling explosion at the end...

Best!

That was powerful! Great writing, incredible sex. Awesome! Thank you.

Well that was a hell of a read if it’s true wow is all I can say it it’s a story then you have a great mind . Thanks for sharing .

I never expected to read anything so long on Literotica but got carried through, even when it was uncomfortable, and there are lines I want to read again.

Holy smokes. Just when you thought you'd read every possible description of pussy eating or cocks in asses/mouths or any number of other shenanigans depicted in this story...

I gotta say from a strictly erotica perspective this does nothing to turn my crank - although the bit where she discovers he was creeping her IG swimsuit photo gave me a flutter - but I certainly recognize expert craftsmanship when I read it.

Really well done and polished. Add another follower to your list...

I have never read anything like this before, anywhere. Although very long, this is the best piece of erotic literature I have read on this site, or any other.

Really great writing. Congratulations.

Love your writing style. It's fresh and fun. Hope you stick with this genre.

Wow... That was awesome.

Congrats.

Hey, yes it is indeed entirely fictional. I'm so happy that at least one person said Holy Fucking Shit. That's sincerely the greatest compliment I can imagine. Literally, those exact three words were what I had HOPED someone would say about this. I put everything I had into this thing. Thank you

When I started reading, I thought I was going to get bored quickly. Man, was I wrong. Your story-telling is masterful! Thank you for a wonderfully intriguing novella!

This narrative is seamless, it holds together and the narration has a dispassion that lends it so much authenticity. I highly recommend this piece for anyone collection

Good god that was so fucking hot. I don't think I've read a story that had so much powerful and deep emotional 'meat' to it. I hope you will be writing a lot more.

Fantastic Story

That was an absolute jem of a story, I absolutely loved it.

Thanks so much for sharing with us.

Actually out-fucking-standing. So real. So emotionally descriptive. I felt like I was watching it happen. Totally turned be on and blew my mind. A fantasy come true. Gotta admit. Made me wish I'd fucked my daughter like that. Or at all for that matter. Wow. I gotta go take a cold shower! Thank you for the great read.

Hey, it's Holly. I'm posting all the other comments I got through email, because apparently some people think that I'm deleting negative comments! I didn't even know you could do that, and I would never do that.

Just want to be transparent, sincerely. I will not post board comments--I specifically asked for those, and those are favors to me, so if you want to you can explore those yourself!

From email (so far):

Suggestion/Request:

Have you ever written any stories of white predatory lesbian women "turning" straight Ebony (or "exotic") women into their lesbian love slaves? Blackmail? Wearing-down their

resistance?

Or a secret circle of rich/powerful lesbians who kidnap/abduct hot "young" ("18+") straight women to sell

into lesbian slavery?

Kidnapping/abduction stories?

Women in uniform? (Catholic High School/Uniformed policewomen)

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Great Story !

Great bio !

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Great writings, wanted to say thanx. But is "unghh" really a word? Random thought! Again, thanx

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I just wanted to say I love the Christmas story, it was very immersive and kept me in till the very end, I just wish there was more with the father but we cannot have everything now can we, or can we.

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I got first hooked by: Way back in my secret imagination, a light bulb clicked on.

And then: I wanted to get ruthlessly, unapologetically fucked.

I loved the stream of consciousness filth of the passage about loving the feeling of squirting cock and the one about "howling back to life".

Enjoyed the humour too.

But it is long and for the purposes of getting it read here, you could do with an edited version or taster maybe?

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That was the greatest christmas in July ever! Wow you are one amazing author. And that was fucking hot. I discovered porn at age 9 too, and it was my friend's dad porn collection of mags, and when the internet was out wow...it made things ever better! Want to chat about some of that fun taboo porn?

I'll post more as they come.

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Hi.

I just finished reading your luau story. I have to say that your writing is amazing. You created a great vivid picture and I can not wait to read what you come up with next.

I read the whole thing in one sitting and I am just drained here, I was swept up in your daddy daughter story even though a lot of it wasnt to do with that. I feel like maybe some parts could be cut but yeah so good and crazy. Going to read this one again 5 stars

Jesus Fucking Christ. In 20 years, I have never read a hotter, more powerful, more goddamn utterly depraved story than this, and now I'm weeping because nothing will ever match it. So fucking hot.

God, I wish I had realized this was 10 pages before I tried getting off to it. I gave up at page 6 (sorely) just to devour the rest without distraction. Your writing is so, so fucking good I sincerely hope to read you in less smutty context (and dream that perhaps I already have). I mean none of this as a dig, just truly fangirling over this piece! I can get off to any ol' thing if I put my mind to it, but I rarely delay gratification just to enjoy the story. Thanks, and I did literally say "holy fucking shit" after I read it :)

This is a great story. I was hoping that they would perform at the luau then the brother/ son would turn up and storm the stage and join in the action. Have you thought about doing a story on the family that were on stage. I would love that.

A+. Strong, strong concept. Urgent but focused. Good-humored. You never let Coll’s insatiable lust keep her from seeming human, making complex observations, having believable insights, tossing out cheeky yuks, etc. You somehow balance careening inevitability with precision pacing. You let unlikely characters breathe and blossom and lend their unique flesh and weight to the snowballing plot. You make me cum using words I did not know could do that. Your vision of debauchery, in both this and my other favorite piece of yours, is my very favorite vision of debauchery. You smuggle art and humanity into your dirtiest, kinkiest scenes, and neither the spirit nor the flesh is diminished in the process. This story owns.

Dear God. This is without a doubt the best story (read novel) I have come across on this site. Your casting of the prose in a format that is autobiographical in nature was a stroke of genius. That style sets it apart from all the other amateurish offerings. I gratefully give you a place of honor in my list of favorite authors. Thank you . . . .

The only issue I have with this story is that it is far too short. I want a good 40 to 50 more pages.

Well written (only found one error, taught should have been taut), engaging, great pacing, hot. I am sad I only discovered this today. I am looking forward to reading your other stories.

Thank you. 5 stars, obvs.

I've just finished re-reading (obviously) this brilliant story and feel compelled to reiterate and expand on my last comment. I still love the personal narrative format you use, and segue is really your long suit. Didn't like the 'Golden Gargling' references at all. Definitely NOT my thing, and I quickly came to the conclusion that I absolutely did NOT like Keith the 'jackhammer'. But hey, I guess you had to write that protagonist in to illustrate her somewhat masochistic bent. I especially liked where left many things unsaid so as to be left to the readers own fertile imaginations. Keep 'em coming . . . .