All Comments on 'The Claiming'

This is a pretty good tale. Unfortunately it was written in present tense, which is very distracting.

there's gonna be a second part to this right? i mean it'd be a shame not to have one... although all in itself its pretty damn good keep it up

I loved our story for how you worded many things. I do hope and encourage you to please continue to write in this vein of thought. It is rare on this site and reflective of the IE philosophy; and of course, very much enjoyable. Excellent work!!

Beginning, middle and end.

If all you wanted to write was spank material you succeeded, but it's definitely lacking for any type of story line.

Very descriptive, but to repetitive.

Keep on writing, but involve more then just the sex acts themselves.

This one left a lot of questions and a what the heck through out.

Very nice.

Chillingly, brilliant writing. His dominance and her servitude causing intoxicating, infectious desires that lead to purposeful awakenings.

This story confuses me. I can't see what her motivation is. Power exchange is one thing for another and her seems to offer her nothing at all, other than his lust... which has no value.