All Comments on 'The Cline's Conquer Time Ch. 05'
by TheTalkMan
- 14 Comments
Anonymousover 11 years agovery nice,
iam a big fan,
don't stop writing,
waiting for the story where mom steals her son from his wife
Anonymousover 11 years agoI am surprised at Derek's tremendous sexual energy which didn't weaken during his successive lovemakings for a day or two. I am interested in which woman he will eventually choose as his main lover after his honeymoon trip with Heather. I wonder if he can't escape from Jocelyn's attraction in the end. I hope that Jocelyn will get knocked up by him and she will get married to him.
Anonymousover 11 years agoYou have lost your mind. There's widespread agreement that you're one of the best writer's on this site. . .but because you've exhausted the mundane cheating angle, you're forced into bizarre shit like this. You know, fucking the bride's grandmother in outer space. Please revisit the surrounded series instead!
Anonymousover 11 years agoI don't think this is that complicated. It's not like he is literally fucking in space. The goal is to have such an explosive orgasm that their consciousness will conquer space-time, in other words, control either time-travel or the other timelines (dimensions). And why not? Helena is the hottest and the name of her timeline is Helena Cline Conquers Time.
Anonymousover 11 years agoReally hot. My biggest complaint has to do with the repetitive nature of your writing - don't know how many different ways you need to convey Helena's ultra-high class lifestyle, but once is sufficient. If you simply located and cut your descriptive redundancies, this 12 page story would be no more than 8 (and shouldn't be).
TheTitLoverover 11 years agoI loved Heather's dream. I cannot express how much. It took me a long time to read this Chapter, now looking forward to the finale.
Anonymousabout 11 years agogreat stuff , really like your writing. hopefully you come up with something new soon !!!
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoYour ideas are very creative, but usually about 1/2 the story is just the same text over and over again...you need an editor.
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