All Comments on 'The Creators Ch. 13'

Omg yes I’ve been waiting for book three for so long! Is the whole book out somewhere already or will you be posting them one at a time

I continue to be disappointed in Julia while being deeply invested in what (I hope) will be an ending other than the one she and Corruption hope for. Thank you for continuing to knock it out of the park!

I will be posting new chapters once or twice a week. Most of the book is finished, but alas, I have a billion other things to do in my life than write online erotica. I'm lucky if I can put out a thousand words in a given day.

Awesome work

This chapter isn’t dark. When Diamond gleefully drowns a bunch of Breytans for not coming up with a cool-sounding name for her, or Julia burns a man alive for not renouncing his religion, I’m left feeling totally desensitized. Because this isn’t darkness with a purpose, it’s just a litany of every-increasing edgy events. You can only read so many meandering and repetitive descriptions of characters committing wanton acts of violence without compunction before it ceases to have any impact on you at all. Why should you care about characters that have at this point far outstripped any moral boundaries to become cartoonish in their villany? Queen Yavara had the same problem toward the end. You couldn’t care about any of the characters anymore because any semblance of likeability they initially had was far gone by the end of the series after they murdered, back-stabbed, and tortured countless innocent people.

Big Fan. Keep up the good work.

Anon,

Thank you for your criticism. The "darkness" I described in chapter 12 that comes to play isn't from the (admittedly somewhat masturbatory) descriptions of violence. This chapter and the next are actually more light in terms of tonality. The "darkness" doesn't really surround the corrupted characters at all, because I view their actions as innocent. They are removed from the atrocities they commit because any moral shield that would've stopped them from doing them is gone.

You get angry at someone who cuts you off in traffic. Maybe you yell at them. If Corruption was inside of you, there would be no moral or consequential barrier to stop you from say, running the person off the road. When I deal with Corruption and the violence she perpetuates, I treat the violence as light-hearted and almost childlike, because the violence means absolutely nothing to the characters. It is emotionally impossible for them to feel anything negative about it.

The "moral" argument Corruption makes is that torture, murder, rape etc... are all banal sins--if they even are sins--because everlasting life is all that matters. Her view is that if life perpetuates to infinity, then trauma of any kind means nothing. When you were a baby, there was a point in your life that you hurt yourself, and it was the worst pain you ever felt. You cried and shrieked in existential agony, and then you got over it. The same would be true (in Corruption's mind) for any horror someone experiences in life, for time would heal all wounds.

So the darkness comes not from the Corrupted characters, but from those who do not feel Corruption's seduction, who have to deal with a finite world and a finite life knowing that this short snapshot of existence is all they have.

As for you not liking the characters, well, I can't do much about that. It's probably a reflection of my own authorship that I have my characters make poor and sometimes downright evil choices based on their own self-interests or the situations they find themselves in. I don't do it as some George RR Martin edgy copycat, but because I, the author, cannot make myself write a typical hero or antihero story. I've tried, and I get bored.

Julia is the hero of her own story, and she will rationalize anything to suit her self-possessed purpose.

Corruption thinks she's the savior of humanity.

Diamond is too young to have developed a purpose in her life; she really just wants to have fun.

Justina tries to do the right thing, but she's insecure.

Angela just wants what's best for her brother.

Brandon wants to do what's right, but he mostly wants to seclude himself in his own world and not be bothered.

Willowbud has no idea who she is or what she wants.

Tera is suffering an acute late-life crisis and is torn between her responsibilities as a mother and her desires as a huntress.

None of these characters in my mind are good or evil. Even Corruption is sympathetic if you view the world from her lens. If I have failed to translate that to you, that is my failure.