All Comments on 'The Cruise'

Seems like a spot or two on page three where Karen stoned and looked for herself a few typos here and there. Otherwise an interesting and enjoyable story.

Oooof, none of the typos were as as bad as me writing arrived getting corrected to stoned. My bad.

"At 38 she was at her prime" LMAO This was clearly written by a woman. Honey, her prime was 20 years earlier...

good first story, take courage and you did it. Hope to read more from you.

Great story. Loved it!

Looking forward to... Another story

A wonderful first effort! Good character development and great balance between erotic and non erotic scenes. I found it guide believable.

My only criticism would be that you seemed to cover M’s situation with her boss twice and so that felt belabored. Also, first mentions of V early in the story had no context and made me wonder if I had skipped something.

I look forward to your future stories!

Amazing first effort! I truly enjoyed and hope you write more!

Great entertaining first effort, yes a couple of early hiccups but so enthralling and sense there could be a continuation. Whatever I think virtually all of us would read anything else you offer this was so good.

Dang. Looks like the writers of She - Hulk made to this site.

Utterly brilliant the best story for months 👏👏👏🙏🙏🙏

Thoroughly enjoyable. I look forward to the new installment.

Thank you all so much for your comments. I am somewhat embarrassed about the typos. I honestly read and reread the whole story many times but missed the errors. Just shows you can’t proof read your own material.

I wish now I had made it into a multi part story.

I never really thought I’d ever write anything like this (I’m more a technical writer) but maybe I’ll have another go.

Thanks again.

This was just a wonderful story, thanks.

Lets see, you got a husband who thinks his wife need a lesbian lover. Wife keeps putting him off, but believe it or not, is coming around to the idea. Wife does meet a women and becomes emotionally involved.

Husband gets what he has asked for and doesn't like it.

Hey I love this story. It has drama, sex scenes, psychological evaluations, romance, and a wife who gets it on the side. As opposed to the male.

Writing was IMO was very good. Sure writers make mistakes. I just don't let them mar that my enjoyment of the story. This is good enough for five big ones. Now do we get a part two? Enquiring minds want to know!

I came across this and it is a lovely story , I truly enjoyed reading it.

The ending gives the impression of more to come.

Please please 🥺 pweety pwees continue Unicorn410.

Danko.