All Comments on 'The Date Ch. 01'

The story started in past tense and switched to present tense in the middle of a paragraph. Stick to past tense all the way through.

Agreed. The tense should change.

Other than that it's a great story. It really turned me on.

Can't wait for chapter 2!

She grabbed the reader by the cock, or tits, right out of the gate with the prospect of Jenns date possibly, having a huge cock !!! Jenns best friend is a proper slut of the highest caliber and, while getting naked to catch some rays, she’s telling Jenn all the juicy details about her best fuck ever, and gets Jenn naked and masturbating to multiple orgasms, in like, the first five minutes. I don’t think even Mother Teresa could put that book down now….. great job !!!