All Comments on 'The Date Ch. 05'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
could have been good

Did the couple ever talk about doing what happened?

Please don't call people by a number it's terribly distracting

The_Fractal_KingThe_Fractal_Kingabout 16 years ago
Numbers . . .

Are a bad thing to use in a story except in rare circumstances. "The first man" and "the second man" would be much less distracting while retaining anonymity of the two men.

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