All Comments on 'The Date Pt. 01'

It was a good start. I hope the next date will be forthcoming shortly.

A great start. Love the sweet, gentle flirting between the two. Here's hoping the next chapter (and the sex) comes soon.

Enjoyed your story, but you might want to have someone proof read it for you. There were a few spots that did not read well or had typos. BUT it was a nice and plausible start to what could lead to some serious incestuous sex! The GOOD stuff.

Wow, no 10 inch dicks, size triple D boobs. Great! A plausible story with a great start to get in some serious incestuous sex with Mom. You might want to have someone proof read your stuff as there were some spots that did not read well or had typos, but overall, looking for part 2 to see where you go with your story....

Love for mom to be wearing sexy lingerie, stockings and high heels on next date !

All the above comments say it all. I hope there's more to come. Although I will say no fancy underwear. The regular thongs or bikini would be fine to me.

Loved the story and yes I agree with the others about editing. But I am so looking forward to the nest installment.

Good story you just need an editor and it could be a great story series .

it's time for this talented 30 year old author to get the boy's big hard cock up where it belongs--up the same cunt he came out of. The wise old saying is true, "a mother's twat is her son's playground," and this boy's ready to make some great big puddles in his personal playground.

You need to edit your work more carefully before you submit it. There are lots of mistakes. And why is this guy so defensive, so worried about money, so unaware of himself?

Great writing. I like what you've done so far. Thanks for this.

I hope there will be a little more voyeurism and teasing before you jump right into it but so far it's been very good. Any time I get disappointed to see there are no more pages, you've done some good story telling :)

Keep it up!

Calls for more. Thanks

The setup was good, the writing definitely needs to be tightened up. There are many good editors you can go to. ex. "The whole we ate all she could talk about was". Did the two of them eat a 'whole'?

Keep writing, get a good editor and you will be getting 4 and 5 stars.

Daytymer

When are we getting a chapter 2 to this story?

...your 'son' character seems a bit feeble, and the 'hit' when it happened, was more than a bit rushed. But that aside, your writing has so many missing and misplaced words it broke the rhythm of the read [pardon the double entendre] I agree with 'daytymer', get an editor. 3 stars.

WHERE IS CHAPTER 2? WHERE IS IT?????