All Comments on 'The Day Hell Froze Over'

Feels like a half-finished story...

Quid pro quo.

yes needs a sequel

Liked it, but I'd REALLY like to see a sequel!

any reason a commenter had to add democrap in his little rant ??

typical american democrap arrogant entitled feckless shiftless cunt. rk

5 Stars from GW on this one .. My ex got nothing from my family . Man she was Dumb . Maybe she didn't know about the small inheritance I received from my Grandmother . I guess i should have told her about it

""Cousin loving" is Boston, Massachusetts. Just can't leave your bigotry out of your stories, can you?"

Probably best to distinguish bigotry of characters, especially negative characters, to the characteristics of the author.

About the story? Not my favorite, but quite a competent entertainment.

Green-something

"Cousin loving" is Boston, Massachusetts. Just can't leave your bigotry out of your stories, can you?

It needs to be finished.

Definitely nowhere near your usual. It is hard to believe the comments of those who gave it a 5. I stretched to a 1.

That last line means about October 20 something that's about the time that the first freeze hits Hell, Michigan. So the author while allowed some poetic license. Shouldn't get carried away. Google it. Oh Hell was established before the Civil War.

A really well written story.

Like many others I got to the end and was left with lots of quiestions and I re-read it a few hours later to try to glean any details that I might have missed the first time before coming to the conclusion that that was exactly what the author wanted - to leave the reader in the same state as the main character wondering what had happened.

Liked it very much.The bit about her mother and the horse would have her wondering about it for months.

Please chalk me up as one more vote for a second part.

Also, she needs to be BURNED... thoroughly.

Very, very, very clever and a good 4 stars.

Now, normally I despair with the "Finish The Damned Story" brigade. The trick is often finishing a story without a complete resolution.

Oddly, here I yearn for the tale that you have studiously avoided telling.

I guess the best I can take from this tale is a new experience from reading the story.

Ramaza asked, "Why didn't he use his evidence in the divorce?" Simple, he wanted her to not fight him in the divorce. He just wanted out. He decided to get word back to her that her lapdog was cheating on her. She couldn't stand that, she divorced him. He got out, he got what he wanted, freedom.

Crow is a tough meal to swallow, harder still when you’ve been spoiled for humanity

This section could be smaller. Reading some of the 'issues' it is obvious that many folks speed read there by missing the answers to their questions (either that or they need less challenging reading).

I lived in Michigan for a year. Its quite a jolt to the system when you enter a town with the sign - WELCOME TO HELL! Thanks for your tales Q, They are amazing!

somewhere east of Omaha

There's a Hell, Michigan. She could get her visit much sooner than anyone thinks.

WOW!!! It was pretty good!!!⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

What a great story but I agree with others, a chapter 2 seems a slam dunk here..

Wonder how long they were married...

Considering she started cheating with the fourth one three months after quitting with the third, she didn't spend much time *not* fucking around on him. At that rate, with only four affairs, you'd figure they weren't married very long (unless some of them went on for years).

It's possible the comment about the 'even a rabbit will fight back though it might take decades' is referring *only* to a future husband or if it could also cover them.

Reasonably speaking, it couldn't be a long time or the odds of finding any info about the older affairs would be much more difficult (unless she's so egotistical that she made little or no attempt to conceal them and regarding the last affair she said 'they were careful' which indicates otherwise).

Just surprised she hadn't cheated with *more* than four other guys if they were married a long time.

Hmm, it feels like the story is only half done? Why didn’t he use all that evidence before the divorce? That would have been so much better for the rest of mankind, to let everyone know what a snake she is, so that anyone is forewarned if they has to interact with her or her father’s company, because his sounds like her role model.

Could be fun with a part two to this, because she needs to burn.

It's fun to see an entitled witch get slapped with a hard dose of truth and reality. Thanks for the story.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Short story with an unexpected plot that unravels halfway through, and a mic-drop ending. Well done.

The fact that you made Shane sound like a money grubbing gold digger was setup beautifully. The way you turned things around with the truth of putting the word out he cheated just to get her attention was awesome and it got better when she saw Shane’s daughter riding the horse and found out it was given to the girl by the dying mother of the rich bitch. Five big ⭐️

I have bookmarked this story waiting for the next part. What happened next...there should be a next part...

Fun story, which I really enjoyed, but I don't get why he let her go "scorched earth in the divorce" when he had all the proof that she had been cheating on him, numerous times and with numerous lovers. Why wouldn't he have turned the tables on her during the divorce after her huge, ongoing betrayal. She clearly had no remorse.

Love to see a story where the tables do get turned, rather publicly, during a divorce for adultery with a rich heiress like her getting what she truly deserves.

It's an interesting story, but other than the reveal about Jasmine, there isn't much meat to it. You hardly get the idea that she's actually taken anything to heart, which is disturbing and sad.

I like that Shane She was such a self opinunated self entitled BITCH i am surprised he stayed with her that long Good story (jaybee186)

Great start but it felt incomplete. More please!

He can’t enforce their divorce agreement in a state she has no connection to and was not a choice of forum in the agreement.

I’d guess most towns in Idaho freeze over on occasion. Just sayin’!

Fantastic story!

We need more!

The ex would be in a body bag sleeping

Some people just are hard to please! Granted, it isn't A Summer By The Lake but it was a interesting story and in the end I thank you. My health was bad for a while and so I've been away from Lit for a few months. Thank you for your tales!

somewhere east of Omaha

No complete story

That story made no sense, you didn't give enough context at the beginning and it will make most people not want to finish it.

Really could do with a second part.

Turns out Eric/Shane could have gotten his wish a lot earlier. And so could Jasmine. Hell, Norway, freezes over all the time. Temperatures in Hell can reach −25 °C (−13 °F) during the winter, just like it does in my part of British Columbia. (Actually, we hit -30C all the time. And even get down to -40C.) Btw, you started the story with Jasmine's ex being Eric, which then changed to Shane. You kept it as Shane for the rest of the story, but still lost a star for the original eff up.

This seems like a longer story cut short, any chance of a follow up, or continuation? It works as a standalone. But the characters you created are entirely engaging. He comes across as patient and noble while she is a narcissist and self absorbed. It would be wonderful if hell to froze over once more.

I love this story. I've read it before and enjoy it each time.

That girl seems like pretty much of a lost cause. Not sure she has enough of a heart or a conscience to ever give up her mercenary ways. A sequel would be appreciated, just to see which way she might go after the meeting with her ex. Great little short one, Q, thanks much for sharing.

Five stars.

Second read ! Wishing for more !

great read,keep up the skeer.

Thanks for another fun read!! Good job!!

Excellent but it feels unfinished ... why did her mother give the horse to the stepdaughter ... fill in the blanks (or write a sequel) and this would be worth 5 stars, not 4.

I would really love the get the sequel…to find out how her mom got him to promise to have the talk with her daughter. His life is obviously so sweet without her, but the pain she would feel finding out how much her mother was disgusted with her would be incredible

Excellent, just as all your stories are.

robdh51 (10/15/23) has closed the open issues on this story. For those who believe a sequel is necessary, I say, "blithhhhh."

qhml1 has delivered an extraordinary example of the entitled, arrogant, rich bitch who discovers her shit really does have an unpleasant odor. Imagine her angst when she figures out what robdh51 has laid out for us all, i.e. "Mom didn't love me best."

Keep 'em comin'!

Would love a sequel. Thanks for your work.

A good story, easily 4 stars. A bit more of his story and the bonus daughter could have made it a 5 star. Please consider that, sometimes, less is not more.

NGL, I wish hell would freeze over again, if only to hear the questions she must have in her head.

Very good. And not one more word needs to be a said. Five stars

I liked it. I understand the ending, but I feel cheated that there is no closure. So many unanswered questions are raised in this powerful but short well written story.

Maybe one day qhml1 will allow hell to freeze over once more.

Thanks for sharing your talents. John aka btrying2.

Bravo! 👏 Very nice indeed.

LOve this story

What story endd righ hen it go nteresti.g

It is OK as an idea but it is somewhat overused in LW, I mean the entitled women because of success/wealth. It could still be interesting if there would be some more elaborate plot which is missing here.

I just love clever!

I don’t give 5 stars very often, but this gets it, brilliant, just brilliant.

Oreospaz1 day ago

So he knocked up his mother in law?

NO!!! His new wife has a daughter and his mother-in-law treated her as a granddaughter!

And the promise he made to at least try an intervention was to her, the mother-in-law!

So he knocked up his mother in law?

There has to be more to this story? Who did the ex-marry who had a Daughter? Did he make it back to become better off than when they were Married? Was there a connection between His Daughter and Her ex wife's Mom? Why did Her Mom send the Horse to Her Ex Husbands Daughter? These are just a few oof unanswered Question?

Short and sweet. Great story, Q, thanks for sharing.

5 stars.

@Anonymous, it doesn't say that her mother stopped communicating with HER, just that her mother stopped mentioning Shane.

excellent portrayal of a spoiled rich kid, and the man who loved her anyway

Some people can look true love ion the face and never know they did so. Such a well done story by a master!

The Hoary Cleric

I disagree about the need for a sequel. It is perfect as it is. The MC does not deserve to know more about her mother, and Shane does not deserve to have to deal with her anymore. Sequels which are as good as an excellent first part are rare, not that I don't think Q could do it. I would just hate to see this story bogged down when it stands alone so well.

An additional ending is needed. There is so much more explanation needed.

Who's Shane, when you're talking about Eric?

Totally agree with a lot of comments, we need a part two.

Great story.obviously the promise was to the mother before she died.need a sequel.

A good story, but it seems unfinished. It feels like I missed something.

A series or at least a sequel would be great. This story has left a lot of people begging for more. Me included. Please Q consider writing the follow up please please pretty please 🙏 As always brilliantly written but needs a follow up. BardnotBard

4 stars a sequel give it the deserved 5

Sequel.

Please.

Maybe she uses vast wealth to CAUSE a freeze in Hell? Cloud seeding and ten thousand gallons of liquid nitrogen?

Great story. But begs for a sequel.

Well done..4 stars..If a sequel inline with this is possible without ruining what you already presented please write it..JZK

wow .............

interesting

5 star

Good story about a narcissistic, entitled (in her mind, at least) cheater.

However, unfortunately despite good writing, this story has a number of spelling and sentence construction mistakes. Proofreading, or getting an editor would fix this issue.

IMHO, this is a four star ⭐️ story.

Good story

I really liked this story with excellent writing and style. The story flows well has plenty for the reader to follow. The ending leaves the reader wanting more could do with a sequel .

A sequel would be great.

Doesn't come any better than this - 5*

I’ll pay you huge sums of money to write a sequel pls

Liked it a lot. Wondering where it goes from here, but it stands on it's own and may be better for not continuing.

Well done.

It took me a few minutes to understand who he promised. Nice.

No second part needed.

5 stars

This doesn't need a 2nd part. It's fine just like it is.

Some entitled rich bitch!! Trailer trash story

Weird story. Nicely setup but I'm wondering if there's another part to come

See? Silver poisoning is real. Shove a silver spoon up a brats ass and they will almost always turn into a self absorbed useless piece of shit. When the shit hits the fan and these self indulgent morons seek to flee from the sewers of their city toilets. They will find that their status means absolutely nothing to the fly over states that they laugh at. To bad that the initial shock will the last thing most of these bottom feeders experience.

Yeah, yeah, part2, perleeeeeease?

Nice gentle twists and a few sharp ones.

Good, but part 2 please to explain the young girl, horse, her Mother, etc.

Good story just too short to get me to five stars.

.hort to get me to five stars. Thanks