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All Comments on 'The Day the Gates Opened Up Ch. 01'

by BDSM_Lady

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
awesome

this was a awesome story please continue this

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Good but needs some help spelling

I read all five pages, your story is good but there are a few plot holes to be addressed. Also spelling was kind of an issue, the story could still be understood, but the errors really detracted from it. A for effort but C+ for execution.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago

I kept reading looking for an explaination or reason why they were saved but there was none. I won't bother reading any more.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
could be interesting, if you improved your grammar

very difficult to follow

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