All Comments on 'The Device'

didnt even get past the first page

There were a few grammatical issues with this story. Overall, I enjoyed it, though.

Hmmmm, interesting and thought provoking even if there wasn't enough sex action.

You need a second chapter for the two players to make use of the benefits bestowed on them and to come across some of the problems too. A second chapter devoted to sex - the build-up has been done, now lets get fucking!

Otherwise it was an interesting idea and instead of being bored to death, I found myself wanting to read on and on. I'd suggest that louiseacd isn't from these islands; as a British writer I too suffer from "overseas-syndrome" - if I use British words I get rude comments and low scores - some people just can't accept non-American spelling... Or perhaps, if 'she' is indeed a cd then 'she' doesn't like the idea of an easy transformation!

I repeat that I felt let down that there wasn't much action but overall it seemed a good start - a different approach to the transgender cross-sexuality.

To the readers:

Thank you for your feedback! I was limited in writing this story as it was a commission and I only had so many words to work with, but I still had fun writing it.

A lot of you wished there was more action, which I understand. For me, this story was more about the domination of one character by the other and the unwilling changes that occurred. Some of the specific stuff was requested by the client, who was a pleasure to work with.

That being said, there are a few changes incoming to this story to help clear some things up and to better grasp the client’s vision. I cannot say for certain when that will be, but it’s in the works. :)

Thank you all so much for your written feedback, and if you’d like to read some longer stories of mine, please check out my profile.

Wishing you all the best,

-ginger

I understand you had limited space to write this but i thought it was a nice twist on the myth of the black box experiment. When you mentioned a commission writing, I was personally wondering if it was your story idea or someone else’s. I don’t need or expect an answer because either way, you made a nice short story out of it. Time to go check out more of your work. Thanks for the story.

Oh for a magic wand ! A four from me.

Honestly, the MC was a bit of a dumbass. Having her adapt on the fly to whatever he wants and needs. Shapeshifting, open to all Kinks, loving partner, harsh when necessary etc