All Comments on 'The Devil Inside Jane'

Boy, she sure sounds like the wife all men are looking for.

LOL. A wife doesn't quickly change from a good girl to a slut. Perhaps gradually over several years. So the story is complete nonsense.

Just a little bit of reality would help.

Well…

It was a fairly well written fantasy. There aren’t too many grammar errors in it, and it was fairly easy reading.

But the storyline…

She’s a psychopathic narcissist who has been fucking around most all of her life (especially during her developmental teen years), but is still able to function at times normally… amazing, absolutely fucking amazing. (Not to mention her obsessive-compulsive personality disorder.)

He on the other hand, is so far into denial, that for years, he notices nothing, but is content with his wife’s fake personality. When he does finally notice, he does an 180degree in his personality makeup and becomes also psychopathic. (Dependent personality disorder plus a touch of a histrionic personality disorder)

And…

They still function! Amazing, fucking amazing…

People who act like that do not live in happy suburbanville. For the short lives that they do have, they live in and out of prisons and jails, and in the streets. They cannot function normally for any greater length of time.

Well…

It was a fantasy, wasn’t it?

I’m going to rate your story with a 50% because you do have talent in writing scenes. Your individual scenes were at times captivating. (If examined out of the context of the whole storyline.) Where this story is lacking is in the conclusiveness and believability, the logic of the storyline.

never say die,but in this case he will surely die of AIDs. This story really sucks.

I loved it...I would have thrown in some dirty pussy eating too...

Like there isn't enough of them already. Tell me does the wimps follow the queen around and hope she farts so they can smell it. Maybe they suck the cocks of all the homeless men their wives fuck...if they have daughters they only have to wait till the girls are eighteen then they can watch their daugheters get fucked by drunken bums on the dirty floor of some pissy mens room. God you british men...hahahahaha men yeah when pigs fly...oh hered a riddle //...HOW DO YOU TELL IF A GUY S BRITISH...look at his little one inch dickie poo and see if it is leaking pee all the time...they have to wear diapers you know. British wimps all need to be eradicated and soon. marriedwithballs@yahoo.com

I thought these garbage stories about slut wives and wimp husbands were a relatively recent development, but this story was written in 02 and is just as disgusting as the sories of recent vintage. Depressing that this type of story seems to go on for years.

the Ct. Yankee

if he's got the slut daughter, should include mother too. his choice has it problems, all that which he could bring to her.

I realise you'r just a bad writer of long standing, Yuck.

he's willing to put up w that, because he loves her?

what else will he put up, move someone to replace him

on a more premanent basis ?

Another "fantasy" of unprotected sex with total strangers by a cheap whore masquerading as a loving wife, backed up by a wimp. I strongly suspect in this cuckold stories, the guy isn't getting off on his "wife" screwing others...he's getting off on the sight of other dicks. This story belongs in either the fetish, bi or gay category.

Yet another story with a ball-less British male and a whorish wife who's head is all screwed up. Pitiful story but it seems to be all to common over there. Do you ever wonder why so many Americans are refering to England as "the place that use to be great Britian"? Spineless men and slutty women, how sad. anon jerry

of creampies

Mindless and perverted. Just like all of Brit "writers" ! Only reason I didn't throw-up is that I skypped most of this dog shit.

Yet another asylum reject !

That is the authors mind dribbled out years ago.

The only two explanations are the author is gay or a woman.

Very balanced analysis. I'm not sure I buy her explanation of why she would live a lie for 5 years

3*

pathetic

Well, it's all been said, though not very nicely. Here's my problem. It doesn't seem very believable. She loves her husband, but just can't control herself. Okay, so far I'm with you. He wants to find out what's really going on, convinced it's the drinking that brings out the whore in her. Fine. This is where it begins to unravel, though. She always wanted a man to respect her, but when she finds one that does, she resents him. And when he finds out it's all an act, he wants more? Doesn't make sense. If she felt the need to be punished, maybe, but resent him? And this is the woman he's been talking to about starting a family? I don't think so! This could have been a fine story if the motivations had remained more accurate. Perhaps if you had stayed with the original idea, the effects of the booze, it may have panned out. As it stands, why should anyone care about either of these characters? Of course, that's only my opinion. Well written, but not well thought out. I give you an E for effort, but that's as far as I'll go. Cheerio, and all that rot!

maybe for their next anniversary they can both be dying of aids.

cantbuy an original thought, probably has AIDS himself, the bloody wanker

This story just ain't mine!!

Didn't read past the 1st page, cucky.

'nuff said.

A friend in college married a woman just like her. It was a shame that she agreed not to screw his friends. Go wolf pack. Thanks again.

bad enough he was deceived for so long but she gave him an out when she 'fessed up. He's just a wanabe cuck

who loves cuck stories and yet bitches like the brain dead fuck he really is. Man some women must have really beat your ass to a pulp dear annony!!

.... “Wait,” Alice said, bringing a wrapped parcel up from under the table at the corner of the room. “Don’t forget your anniversary gift. Here. Don’t open it now.” ....

I was hoping that it could get out of here a surprise ending that could rescue the wife and justify the acquiescence of the husband. And instead, nothing. What a pity!

I call absolutely bullshit no man stays with this type of std riddled trash

OK. So you realize she's an alcoholic (for what sentient human would not pick up the obvious signs) and you let her drink anyway. Hmmpph. Sounds like you're not a husband, but just a perv who's wife's wellbeing takes a back seat to your selfish desires.

I guess her mom, as screwed up as SHE was, was right after all. YOU were too young to get married!

no man can be that stupid to keep a whore like her write a story where he gets rid of the bitch then you got a story not keep the slut

Catesby

Your tale of cuckoldry was at best a highly derivative fetish tale, and as such should have been tagged for the Fetish sub genre. I found it impossible to see any of your characters as likeable. You portrayed hubby as a cuck wimp who got all excited watching his slut wife being fucked by other guys. The supposedly shy wife was nothing but a slut. Since protection was not apparently used, one could only imagine the high number of possible STIs fermenting in that swamp of a vagina.

Nick should just jump off a bridge. He is too stupid to exist. Jane will come to a bad end eventually

but this struck me as hot. The type of girl we would all like to run into, a couple times in our life. Dont think I'd take on to it well if she was a wife, but the occasional debauchery of a chaste wife is a nice change in weather in a long relationship.

The author that heard how sh*tty some other cuck story on LW was and just couldnt resist calling out "HOLD MY BEER!!!!!!"

THIS IS THE WINNER!

THIS IS THE WINNER OF MY VOTE FOR THE WORST STORY ON "LOVING WIVES" PERIOD.

I don’t think this whore needed to devil to make her husband a cuck.

She's just one fuck away from an STD at the rate she collects guys. And so is he if he stays with her.

Yet another story where, despite all the protestations of love the participants are actually bound together only in a twisted desire to get ever more sex wherever and whenever they can get it. Him, in surrogate form by watching her, and her as a full blown whore.

Another stupid cuck story. 1* You should have warned your readers. Many of us readers HATE cuck stories and always appreciate being warned. Will never read another of your stories.

Just looked up your cat. of stories. Glad to see you stopped writting.

That story is an affront to true literature. Stick with your day job.