All Comments on 'The Dream Gift'

Don't listen to that other comment trying to insult your writing. I thought it was very good and would be glad if there was a part two, but it looked like it was only a 1-time story due to the ending though. Keep up the great work!

I liked it.

You should have submitted this one for the Halloween competition, those teeth are either vampire of succubus of nature :)

Otherwise it was a rather sweet, a tad bit unusual, quirky, dorky and fun story that I would love to see a continuation of. If not I'm not complaining, it was entertaining read!

Love it keep going

I hope you are going to add more to this story .

It is great

Would love to see this with one more chapter.

It's a lucky lad who has a choice between his sister's slit and his mother's twat.

Not to bad I didnt mind it. But as they are saying you should do a sequel mate. That might actually be from the mother or sisters side of the story so. That we knew what also was going through their mind as well

In the story there was a thunderstorm going on but you mentioned the moon wasn't that bright. Good story except the part kids were to br n thtn orn.

Was in those letters ?

I hope that doesn't sound rude I just mean this could become something more and it has also given me an idea great story

The idea of them becoming pregnant is hot. It's too bad they all weren't vampires or werewolves, and becoming pregnant with his sperm.

liked the story, but the preposterous idea that they were instantly pregnant, and that he could tell, needed to be explained/excused.

Need a second part to this story so bad.

Totally needs part two

I would love to read a continuation of this story

How can there be a thunder storm and the moon out

AWESOME story ,

Loved the sharp teeth on her blowjob.

Kinky sister

"boy toy" story. Gawd. Too many of them on here. STOP, PLEASE!!!!

Never had sex with a Goth woman, would like too. Not too many Goth women in South Jersey.

This is a very confusing story, is Jay a vampire?

"This is a very confusing story, is Jay a vampire?"

It's interesting that you're the first person to ask this. There are tons of references to that, including the silver mirror and name-dropping Carmilla in comparison to how she acts like. I mean I know this has some awful writing because it wasn't edited at all, but yeah the idea is that she has been a real vampire all along and not just a fake one, and the reason for the whole thing is that her vampire charm is causing it.

Jay being a Bisexual Incestuous Virgin Goth Vampire is taking things a little far in my opinion.Not to mention the conception of her and her brothers baby.I mean from just about every story about vampires as I've heard 99.995% that vampires can't get pregnant,unless you have seen a certain movie with a shiny vampire by the name of Edward and a girl named Bella.

But to stipulate,would Jay and her Brothers child be born as a vampire,and instead of drinking breastmilk the baby would have fangs and drink his or her Mothers blood.Not to mention Mom or Grandma getting pregnant too and having her Sons baby thereby becoming Sons brother or sister.

But I want to know is Jay planning on turning her Brother and Mother into vampires so they can be one big Vampiric Incest Family where they all drink eachothers blood along with their sex juices.I admit this story is weird on so many levels,but to have a family who have wild blood-drinking pussy sucking cock gobbling sex is just kinky as shit.I hope Jay manages to give her brother lots of vampire babies who feed off daddy-brother while mom-sister joins in.

Like Demon Succubus's,the reference to Jay having pointy teeth implied she was different.And about Johnny getting both Mom and Jay pregnant at the same time or on the same night seems unlikely,but if he did do you think Johnny could marry or have a ceremony where they choose to be married in name only.

Regardless I think Jay and Johnny should marry and have lots of questionable demon goth babies together.

Stop including a 3rd person in all these damn incest stories!