All Comments on 'The Envelope - a 750 Word Story'

This story seems to be open for those who have the ambition and skill for an obvious sequel to this little story. Working with the two doctor visits the obvious challenge would be the how and why. Michelle was still trying to get pregnant but we don't see anything about her going outside her marriage for some help so if she is happy she must think that Mike is the father. If the doctor told Mike that he is sterile maybe he is clinically sterile with a low sperm count that would let the doctor make that diagnosis. But if there are even just 15 million little swimmers it only take one to find its way to the mama's ovum and jackpot!!! We have a winner. Just my thoughts. I'd like to see CunnyLinguistToo give this his/her ending.

Oh crap, ain't this a kick in the tail! I hope your next 750 brings my mood back up.

nice

Nicely done.

Sorry but I saw that coming a mile off.

Predictable, but that's not unexpected in this category. Still enjoyable. 5*

Great job. Short, sweet and to the point. Thanks for your writing.

great job! Would have liked another 50 words on how he kicked her to the curb, maybe sent her home with mommy and daddy!

5 star story!

Very nice twist. Looked at first like he'd be having to tell her he'd been let go then bam!

A bit of harsh reality, eh?

Another 5* on the 750 Word Challenge. I especially like how you mix up the reasonable reconciliation of Pizza For One with the mic drop moment here.

@KRD19254, if he challenges paternity within a reasonable period, and BEFORE birth certainly qualifies, he can in most cases avoid child support.

Again for a nearly perfect 750 word story.

And you can see the glow in the distance from the nuclear blast.

That’s just sad. Well written.