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I really mean it, what the fuck is this supposed to be???????

The writing you have writer is most perplexing. It is not something you would definitely find on Literotica. It is most certainly something a person smoking some seriously strong weed might have writed while writing their writes. Having not spoken as a first language English, you have writer some weird ass shit. I mean, "Though her butts aren't as great as Mary's, she is downright sexy."? That is some line there, buddy. What the hell were you trying to say? That was "downright" confusing! What killed me, however, most definitely, while reading this, is that you've got some family members with names like "Reena", and others with names like "Mary"? Does she answer phones for some sort of out-sourced customer service or something? Most definitely?

Here's a suggestion, most definitely: Figure out the kind of story you intend to write, and stick to the fucking script. Nobody is interested in a few paragraphs describing the dinky apartment in which this story supposedly took place. If you can't manage that much, just stop writing. Can you do that for all of us who are still scratching our heads and wondering if this whole story was a complex prank?

I have to agree - what the fuck is this? You say this is a multi-part story? Save your effort, pal, and don't write any more of this so-called erotic story, crap like this deserves to sink without trace. Go away and get a job where you're not tempted to write any more "erotica" like this, because you truly, deeply, fervently suck at it.

This story will be reposted again and I will make sure to edit all entries before release. Apologize for not editing.