by BadPup
I'm a mom myself,your story is soooo hottt ,I had the hardest orgasm I have had in years,THANK YOU ,so much !!!!! momfrmnj13
This a sexy start. You have a great talent for description and for dialogue. It was if I was there with the Mom telling me her story - very erotic indeed! Looking forward to future stories!
Much too long!!! This is an erotic web sight not a venue for wannabe Hemingways.
I like the way you teased while bringing shuttle facts to the story. Vividly expressed sex was the main thing that i saw that made the story hot. Thanks for your good work....Rich
A pretty damn hot story.
The only negative thing is that the woman is a real cunt before the story starts focussing on herself and her son.
I usually don't read this type of story but the title caught my eye and i couldn't stop reading and ..... No issues with the length. Loved all the descriptions. Just loved it. I will read more of your work. Peggy
Very well constructed! And unlike many other incest stories out there, you took the time to show how the lust built over time. The characters didn't just jump into bed. The way you wrote it, I can easily see people getting to that point and allowing themselves to throw caution to the wind!
Well done!
erotic, excellent, sexy and begging for a sequel, keep writing.
Oh my GOD. Luv this story. Need to know more of their life together.
i loved it i really did but the u cut it short after they finnally got together in my opnion. u could have gone into details on what happened after the first night together
So hot! Loved your "good girl becomes a bad girl" perspective of the story, and the descriptions of Mom's super sexy new wardrobe.
Hell of a story, lots of build up, and great descriptions. I was however disappointed with the quick ending. You could have drawn out the first sex between them with the same elaborate details. What happened?
I hope you can edit or re-do the ending.
I hope more chapters follow. You are a good writer but looks like you ran out of steam at the end.
I loved reading this story, it is a great first story. You should write more stories like this one. Do so soon.
Awsomly HOT! The teasing was so hot. I would love to see a follow up. I never heard of Lexus Anderson. Did you fabricate the porn star?
It took a long time to get there, but by the time we got to the 5th page it had hotted up. All the right ingredients were there, a hot, slutty, big titted milf-bitch who was desperate for her sons big cock, dressed like a slut and eventually they fucked. Would of liked a lot more fucking including some hot anal action, that's the least this slut deserves!
A nice slow build up, lot's of descriptions of mom's inner struggles as well as of what turned her on about her son. Good grammer, sentence structure, etc. It was a pleasure!
the slow change from respectable to slutty is highly believable with the turmoil going on with mom and son
Great build up and awesome conclusion to a very good story. I just missed more dialogues, since they help a lot to develop the story and the characters. Thanks a lot for your effort and keep up the great work. ^__^
very hard to follow, horrible...
Your writing jumps all over the place and gets very boring..snoooze...
yousuckatwriting
Your writing has some problems. The story line is a tad slow and is a bit jumpy. You could fix it by using a story board before you start and speed things up a little. That being said I think you did good for a first time. I still gave it five stars. Keep up the good work you can only get better.
incest themed stories as I do some other genres, but, Mr. BadPup, "The Evolution of..." was absolutely the very best of any I had read. A GREAT read.....Thank you....sincerely....I hope you decide to continue writing.
I was hooked as soon as I read your line that her orgasms came, "one after the other, like freight cars on a long train disappearing into a tunnel." The most cum-inducing simile I have ever read!
You (IMNSHO, of course) dragged things out unnecessarily long, since no one (especially healthy young testosterone bombs) hold out that long.
Anyway, 5 stars.
To Anonymous. Do you even know what ADD is? This a place for writers to send what they think will turn on the reader. If you don't like it you can do like you do a lousy book. Take it back to the Library. Get up off your own dick for a moment and take it for what it's worth. I'm thinking You need that operation. Ya know the one where they put a piece of Plexiglas in the front of your stomach so you can see where you're going with your head stuck so far up your own ass.
This is a fun, fantasy story. Although it is part of the gorgeous mom/stupendously hung son genre that permeates this subject, it is also, minus a few editing glitches, well written. I do wish the characters had more depth though. As the story is told, son goes to school, comes home and thinks of nothing but sex... with his mom. i actually found where she finds out that he doesn't miss football all that much to be an interesting sequence. The dialog works well enough, which is usually a problem for most writers. There is a decent amount of heat here, especially from Mom's not so subtle teasing. A solid, enjoyable read.
It was getting to the stage where it was starting to get boring. It went on and on and on and I was actually wondering if anything was going to happen and when it did the story was over. I like a good build up to a story but what was a little over the top.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
You started great, built the story, and the anticipation, then as soon as they fuck...its over. C'mon mannn! Write a sequel, it could definitely support one, and let the creative juices flow. I know you've got it in you! Peace
I liked it. I’d like a sequel, but you paid everything off in the end so it could stand on its own.
Damn this storyline had me so fucking hard the whole time I actually jacked off 3 times and came so freaking much each time while reading it
Larry Smith