All Comments on 'The Expat'
by Kojak01
- 58 Comments
Anonymousover 6 years agoLovely story. It's so nice when a man falls in love with a woman and her child both (or the other way 'round). 5*. But I found it a bit funny when you used the word 'hydrophobia'. It is a synonym for the disease rabies, and in the US at least about the only way it is used. I could not help but visualize Suze with foaming mouth and yellow eyes, springing at Phillip to tear out his throat. That unfortunate contrast with her loving nature was amusing in an odd sort of way. No matter, though. I like your writing; keep it up!
Anonymousover 6 years agoHydrophobia is in fact a fear of water which just happens to be one of the symptoms of rabies. The authors use of the word is correct as understood by any person who knows real English.
Overcriticalover 6 years agoIf there's one thing consistant about this website it's the understanding in all the categories that this is a medium for fantasy. The protagonists in this story are all virtually perfect. They almost always do the right thing and in that sense they're utterly unbelievable. Yet, this is what Literotica is all about and we all love it. I get a kick out of the nitpickers who don't like this behavior or that (and once in a while I do it myself), and offer alternative plot mechanisms. (The only aspect of Literotica that's unpardonable is the highlty erratic quality of the spelling, grammar and continuity of the stories.) To me this was a 5* fantasy and although it would have been nice to have a little adversity built into their lives to spice up the story, I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you, Kojak, for a walk in the Land of Make Believe.
Anonymousover 6 years agoStory. Usually I like more character development. I'd loved more info on Amy's background but wasn't critical. I thought they moved rather fast but it went well with the ending. Suze. What can I say? Sounds like a serious cutie a dad would be so proud to have as a daughter. The Gold Medal at the ending was incredibly moving. 5 stars. Shame no part 2 tho.
J_Reader_Comicsover 6 years agoAbsolutely wonderful. The only thing I'm really left wondering is how Connie always knew. Part of me was hoping she turned out to be Amy's mom.
Anonymousover 6 years agoCan a story get any better than this, I dont think so. Thanks for sharing it.
ReedRichardsover 6 years agoOK, the gold medal was a bit too much, but when Suze first called Phil 'Daddy,' well, if you've never experienced that, you can't know how great it feels.
boatbummover 6 years agoA heartwarming Romance for Christmas Eve.... Thanks very much!
I have to say that your writing is terrific, especially for someone whose mother tongue is German. I've enjoyed both of the short stories you've contributed, so now I'll move on to one of your longer works.
Bravo!
ukdukeover 6 years agoA lovely story.
Had to smile at the ending but hey who doesn't want their children to be the best they can be? After all this IS fiction. So everything is possible!! Lol!
Anonymousover 6 years agoThis is the kind of story for which I envision this forum was meant. It serves as one of the too few role models for authors of romantic erotica to follow.
Anonymousover 6 years agoThanks Kojak01 for improving the Romance section. I agree with another comment, and I hope this serves as a great example to others, of what belongs in Romance.
Horseman68over 6 years agoA very enjoyable read with warm and absorbing characters that make me look for more from this author. Well done.
Anonymousover 6 years agoInspirational
rightbankover 6 years agoBrilliant,
When reading the ingredients of a compound you find inert, active, and sometimes a catalyst. This Young family has three active ingredients, but Suze is the catalyst.
rightbankover 6 years agoMedical Definition of hydrophobia
1 : a morbid dread of water
2 a : extreme fearfulness of swallowing liquids that is symptomatic of rabies and results from painful spasms of the throat
In classic cases, there is a fear of drinking liquids, or hydrophobia, despite thirst due to spasm of the throat muscles. —Lawrence K. Altman, The New York Times, 24 Aug. 1993
b : rabies
Rabies victims at first feel a general malaise and restlessness, then grow increasingly agitated with painful spasms of the throat. … Soon they cannot drink, which is why rabies has been called “hydrophobia.” —Wayne Biddle, A Field Guide to Germs, 1995
AnAncientover 6 years agoYour English writing is way better than mine, and I was born & bred in England!
I enjoy your stories; as they have a lot of depth, and you don't insert excessive sexual content.
NHARMZWAY77about 6 years agoAs is my daily usual, I was briwsing the new stories today and found "The Text Message Ch 1"... I read it, and easily found myself encompassed into the story. So, I decided to check out your other work. Boy, am I glad I did. Your storytelling is extremely easy to become immersed into, and I found myself completely engrosssd. Thank You. Keep writing.
NHW
Anonymousabout 6 years agoWhat a great story. I was sorry to see it come to an end. Worthy of 5 stars, without a doubt.
Anonymousabout 6 years agoWhat a wonderful story this is!
Great from beginning to end ,with characters worth caring about.
AND,what a delightful and ,tear-evoking,ending! ~ 5+
WhoGivesAShitabout 6 years agoExcellent work! I was kind of surprised that they chose to move to Innsbruck. Amy being close to her parents, and the depth of their support; combined with Phil upset that his mother was gone and his father estranged... I thought they might want to be near whatever family possible.
mmollealmost 6 years agoGreat story, I keep returning to it. The Daughter's Medal and speech at end just puts me over the edge each time. Excellent writing I could have read 20 more chapters of that family.
Anonymousover 4 years agoIn a very distinct way I wish you had continued the story from when he moved in to the Olympics. But still a very enjoyable story. Thank you.
cybojiover 4 years agoStory of yours I read is better than the last. Great work. Keep writing.5
Anonymousabout 4 years agoA very nice story. Glad to hear that Amy and her daughter managed to escape the United Banana Republic of America. Thumbs up!
Ravey19about 3 years agoGreat story. Second time of reading. Great author, some cracking stories here.
5 stars
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoBeautiful story ☺️. Romantic and lovely story 😊❤️😊❤️😊❤️. Definitely a 5 star 💫🌟💫🌟💫🌟💫🌟💫🌟 rating.
muskyboyalmost 3 years agoWonderful story, loved it. Wish you had explained the Suze parentage......
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoHe praises you for things that he usually lambastes authors for. Go figure.
There are a few issues that I’d like to point out: There wasn’t much dramatic tension. Other than the issue of what would happen after three years, the plot ran out as easily predicted.
And everyone, except for the absent father, was perfect and flawless. Kind of boring. 4*
Nitpicalmost 3 years agoTwo things,if Amy is that attractive,why is she single,and even mermaids don't learn to swim in five minutes,let alone four year old girls.
Anonymousover 2 years ago4-5 years old are not that articulate, don't swim a lap first time, and I seriously doubt anyone can work a full day and then swim 60 laps. Enjoyed the love story, his hesitance, and the growth of their affection. Just felt the main character had no flaws beyond not being able to cook. 3*
SatyrDick8 months ago[16.09.23]
Nth reread of this beautiful tale!
The only thing that 'stuck in my craw' as-it-were is the 'old wives tale' that you have to wait a prescribed amount of time before (casually) swimming beit 30 or 60 minutes...this is not a medically verified thing per the Mayo Clinic.
This depends on person/food type,, but as a general rule it ain't true.
Now if you were to do strenuous swimming exercising/competing, then yes - but other than that nope.
11/10!!!!!
Anonymousabout 2 months agoOne of those stories one wishes would go on happily forevermore.
The Hoary Cleric.
Come back Kojak, we miss you.
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