All Comments on 'The Family Vacation'

Not bad but it needs some work .Maybe get someone to edit you it may help . Good luck and keep writing ....

What is it about your characters that motivate them to violate the taboo? You have them jumping into bed with each other with no explanation other than "why not?"

Sex scenes were excellent though. Keep writing. You'll get better and better. Thanks for the story.

I'm impressed - not only was this a good story for only your second posting, but you actually got two anonymous comments that were constructive criticism! Most anonymous comments run along the lines of "tihs suxx u cannt rite gud." Good job - I am looking forward to your next story.

you need to learn can from can't

Go back and look at your first paragraph on Page 1.

"miss calculated"

C'mon, man!

p.s. otherwise a good story

sorry with no set up for the why, i just couldnt get into it.

Miss Calculated here. Seems you need to go back to English class or take a class in short stories. Learn the writing process. Live the process. I will teach you.

I had banked my two weeks of vacation at the engineering firm I worked at for the last two years and this year, with my five year anniversary, I had picked up week number three

That makes absolutely no sense. Can you even do math? *