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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Just pointing out that Page 2 has a comma where the sentence should definitely end & the story break.

Also, once, the man refers to his own anatomy as a "cook". It should go into the mouth.

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A hobbyist of a writer thus far. Tired of just writing things that remain locked away. It is time to see if others enjoy reading some of my stories, whether that be 1 or 1000 other people. Got to start somewhere so I am starting today.

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