All Comments on 'The Fire In His Eyes Ch. 01'

Great start

Great beginning chapter cannot wait for more story

Nice story hope there will be more chapters added can hardly wait to read Carmen has made her new pet HER girl

Great so far but way to short

Hmm, potential.

If you plan to continue this, don't let go of or take way Bo's 'spark', that's the premise of this story and seeing him being belittled/broken/feminized/etc would basically derail the point of the story.

She can still be dominant to him if you want, but i feel he would be a switch-sub that wants his boundaries respected if that's where you want to take this.

Hell make him a power bottom or the dominant one for the sheer novelty of it, compared to most of the stories on this site.

Essay over, best of luck

Forget the other poster! Let her break him into a limp dicked assgasming sissy!

Ended much too soon. MORE PLEASE.

"Get rotated, idiot"

Carmen rethinking life choices makes me laugh.

Excellent start. Please continue. This will make a good series. I look forward to more