All Comments on 'The First Time I Saw You'

...but DAMN, that was badly written. The author is barely literate. A good editor might have helped, but as it is, this submission has set a new low for this site.

Reading the above comment, I have to disagree. You're far from the worst writer I've seen on this site, and "barely literate" is a pretty mean description for your work. There was a decent base there, but you really, really need to work on the finer things like punctuation, pacing, and descriptive writing. Good luck and keep going!