All Comments on 'The Gala'

Dark and dangerous on many levels. This kind of play is what leads to hotel staff finding bodies. Fantasy fulfillment that endangers health and safety is poorly done and squashes any sexiness. You tagged roleplay. Your female may have been playing a role, but you wrote Blake straight up as a perpetrator of a violent assault. There was no play to what he did. Fuck Steve with a rhino dick in his ass for not listening to her concern before and for leaving her in a dangerous situation. It's scenes like this that really put the lie to doormat subs mooing on about how they trust their dom and their dom would never put them in danger even in the face their dom's poor judgment.

Your writing was fine. Your content, not so much.