All Comments on 'The Gander'

Cheating wives stories tend to focus on realism especially BTB (ignoring the Navy Seal ex-husbands thrown in), so the unrealistic take on this story made it seem pretty ridiculous. That being said, I enjoy an over the top story from time to time but this story needed to be edited a bit more. Some of the timing and absurdity didn't mix well with the rest of the narrative. It would have been better if you went all in with the craziness than try to tone it down at the end. It kind of fell flat for me.

Still it was a fun read and I did enjoy reading it. Thanks.

I love the story. AAAAAA++++++

You lucked out and got a wife with a mean right cross!

5

I have to confess that I grew bored toward the end of the first page, all very unlikeable people doing unlikeable things. So I skipped to the end hoping to read that the whole cast had died in some freak accident, but alas not so.

It was all pretty predicable as soon as he confessed to how many women he was cheating with, then when Tracy was introduced I really did have to stifle a yawn.

Well written but absolutely no likable characters, and the biggest and worst possible cliché to end on.

Can't believe I'm saying this, given how I usually love your stories... but I kinda stopped reading halfway through page 1 and just scrolled through page 2. I mean, yeah, the title made it pretty clear from the start where this was going, but I was still surprised just HOW predictable the whole thing turned out to be.

Change from your norm, and nicely done. Made a decent read on my commute:)

Fun read! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Not up to your usual standard, not because it was short. But I felt you struggled with it, it didn't have the usual flow.

Very average not up to your usual standard, ⭐️⭐️⭐️

A fun read. Sometimes life throws more angst and gritty reality at me than I really want. That’s when I really appreciate a nice cruise down Cliché Highway through Trope City to bring me the escapism I crave. Thanks very much for the diversion, as well as Twins!! 5*

As always, I really enjoy your stories.

Well done.

Good one. O

It was all a fun twist built around the indignant wife facing her husband's cheating, until she was exposed as the slut that she was. She condemned herself. It was funny and light.

This one was a bit of a slow starter, but his laid back approach to the reveal was interesting. He gives her enough rope (with his confession) to hang herself. That the five cheating husbands are only peripheral to the story was unique. Of course, the BTB by own actions by his wife was a nice touch.

Loved it, OTO!!! Thank you for writing!

As Laurie was an STD carrier, the relevant health agencies would immediately have identified her the first time any STD was diagnosed. If that inevitability happened, the rest of the story falls apart.

Also too fantastical to have all the relationships develop[ without anyone knowing anything until the end.

I see the story as as a lot of good writing wasted on an unbelievable plot.

Yes! Escapism! Relief on the train ride to drudgery. A hyper parody of of many submissions here. 5*

Cheers. I had a ball reading it.

I enjoyed it for what it is. A well written and entertaining STORY. Thank you. Always a good day when I log in and your name pops up with something new.

Good story although Laurie's part was too ( yes "too") short. Why did she marry him? She was cheating the whole time - why? How did it start

Great little story! Don't ever apologize for writing a short little zinger!

I'm normally a fan of your work but I found this one pointless and witless.

I liked it although the ending was anti-climactic. I was hoping when the three sisters came in at the end Tracey was going to offer picking back up with the lonely sisters. Guess I spend too much time on this site - LOL. 4.2*

All your work is good to great!

How exactly does one kiss "a hot MILF while also eating out another woman"?

Was a bit surprised when I saw the length, but you did a nice job of telling a shorter story. Always enjoy your work!

Love it - another excellent tale from the mind of John Other!

I enjoyed this short story, John. Thanks for sharing and I give it full marks.

Always excellent. 5 stars from me.

MaximusTheMad needs to check out Sleepery Jim's "Raine on her parade" - and others. Most stories here are fiction i.e. not real. Of course oddles of commentors try to match them up with reality as they see it and scold the author when they are unable to get a match.

This most excellent work of fiction well deserves it five bright stars.

I guess that I may have been correct at the beginning when I wondered, since Laurie's husband didn't ask for the up-sized breasts, who were they actually for? Looks like there are about five suspects.

Short can be good. Sometimes you can get a little long winded.

I see the MC in this was drinking beer, not your normal favourite tipple.

Your favourite tipple does cast a shadow on the story though, as might well be said:

"Bugger me, that's a rum do!"

I do tend to prefer (not quite the right word, as they are heart-wrenching)? your longer stories, but this was a great bit of fun.

Average, at best. Certainly nowhere near the quality of all of your other tales, which I universally loved. Very dialogue driven, which can be a very good thing, but in this case did not hit the mark. Implausible. Three stars from me.

I must say that, when I saw your name, I anticipated so much more. A bit of a downer...

JPB

I wonder if, because of the increase in boobs, Laurie began to prefer a comfortable missionary position in bed with her husband, then how did she manage with five lovers?

Not your usual story line, but it had to be told and you did a fine job telling it.

Entertaining and easy to read

I also found it not up to your usual standard and rather boring.

Great Northern is rat piss. I will fight you over this.

Thanks for the (short) story :)

This was choppy and used a lot of words to say very little. You need to watch your mistakes with their when it should have been they're and the always problematic your and you're.

I think it was good although ir became a teenage-boy-wet-dream fantasy for a while. Thanks @other2other1.

Your aim is excellent. You hit the bullseye on every target, cliché, that you selected. Great read. 5s

The ex wife appears like a totally demented woman, blinded by her extreme selfishness and narcissism. The husband is described like an ice cube, totally emotionless. So, a bit too much flat for a short tale, but since this belong to the 5% of the LW tales that are not following the endless bombing fetish-cuck propaganda, it deserves the full prize: 5 stars.

Agree 100% with Cracker270 — for what it purported to be, it was good. Shallow….but understand that every story can’t be deep and wide.

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4 ****

You wasted your ink on this one. Terrible.

I think it is a great little story, short and to the point.

Just another re-write of a way overused cliche'. Cuck husband fucks the cheater's wives. Divorced cheating wife falls on unexplained "hard times" and cuck husband lives happily ever after. You two are way better than this.

I think it just ended up being kind of gross. If it was humor it needed something funny, instead it just sounded like every other cruel revenge story on here.

I enjoyed this tale. Good thing Tracy showed up in the story, otherwise the twins and the other 3 women may have been fighting over Tony……..

Thanks for writing

Well done!

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Be well!

Excellent "short story" loved it

5stars

@someoneother, I can be at least as much of a reality Nazi as the next person, but c'mon! Can't we sometimes just have a little fun?

From the story, literally, copy paste:

"they had no issues helping me eat out any of the others. Seriously, kissing a hot MILF while also eating out another woman."

Two mouths and tongues eating out a vagina are bound to "kiss" each other even trying not to.

P.S. Nice nickname though.

A great yarn ... Thankyou

I enjoyed it a lot more than your long winded drawn out stories.

"No idea if it was her."

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So she was the only person in the world?

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It was ... okay. About twice as long as needed, and her phony anger at thinking he was cheating when she was the one who was cheating all along has always been a problematic plot line, especially a case like this where she's still pissed at him though she's the guilty part. This comes off more as a parody.

I liked it. Cliches aside, I wouldn’t characterize responding in kind as being an asshole. Maybe he is an asshole for other reasons, but not for repeating her actions. At least he had a reason for his actions, and helped the women recover some self esteem. He didn’t rub Laurie’s nose in it. If he’d been an asshole about it, no way her father would have referred him to a friend for a job.

5 stars. Love the trope of the accuser being the cheater themselves and will never complain about a happy ending for those that deserve it. Just darn, the ex was willing to sleep around with 5 other guys while playing dead fish with the husband and leading to 6 divorces. Doesn't even seem like the sex with the other guys was better (unlike the MC and the other wives), just that she was going for quantity over quality.

to describe just how good your stories are. First rate! Five stars AT LEAST!!!

Good one. I think you should try a few more shorter stories. Thanks for sharing.

Serves her right. Laurie got just what she deserved, NOTHING. Empty life.

5 stars all day.

Loved it, thank you.

Another good story

Thanks for writing

Another 5-star tale with nice helping of snark, with a BTB result on the wife who attacked her husband as a cheater...

...while she was whoring herself out through their whole marriage !

Yes, you hit a bunch of cliches, and still told an enjoyable story.

Nicely done, Sir !

Improbable as you said but fun to read and no doubt fun to write. ps if you would be so kind, please pretty please look up the correct use of; you, your, you're.

Tale you always have decent stories.

Very entertaining and a new (at least to me) discovery method! Thanks!

3 stars and I liked the way you told it.

Good on ya mate! Good yarn!

Dude, I had to stop counting the cliche`s when I hit 100. Excellent story though.

I enjoyed that. It was a fun read.

You tend to write an intelligent story Mr Other . Knowing that , I wouldn’t take it this story any Other way , for doing Otherwise would be very unwise indeed . Thank you Mr Other for the Other 24 good reads ! Adding this one rounds it off to a fantastic quarter of a centennial ! I hope you continue writing to beyond the century mark .

I didn’t care how the story flowed. Not up to your usual story telling. Just one opinion. 3*

I much prefer your normal way of telling a story, this one has an uneven and disrupted flow to it that really isn't your stile, also very short and compressed, which i really don't like, sry but only 3 stars this time.

Hilarious

That was fun.

And when you look at this fine little story

from the fun angle,

I've got no problem giving it top ratings.

Solid story. Good on the wives of his wife’s orgy partners telling him what was going on. More props to the cheated on ladies for helping him with his revenge.

I liked it!

Fun, fun, fun, fun, fun, fun, funtastic!

Unrealistic, fun little story.

Five stars.

Fun all around!

UN-believable!

I love it!

Too bad he did not end up with the twins, but as long as he is happy and they are faithful!

Pretty fun, once in a while a lighter, funnier, faster read is welcome.

A very fun read. 5 stars from Xluckylee

5 Stars from GW

Perfect little story.

Thanks

Karma

You're light, it's lighter than your other stories but it's still a slam-banger. 5*

Light, fun, made me smile.

Not bad at all.

Shortest, not your best but not bad. Keep writing, 4 stars.

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Short - yes, but still up to your high standards.

11/10!!!!!!

Sweet, sweet redemption!!

Would have been 5, but 'Beer' let you down that star, why you ask.

Simple, in most countries what you drink isn't Beer but lager, or blond Beer as some call it, why change the name to Beer, again simple, lager carries a less than defined status about it, doesn't sound so great and is also usually attached to louts....as in drunk all the time.

Beer is also attached to wise older men, that sip it slowly will contemplating the world.

Lager is for the younger stupid drunks, that drink far too much and make idiots of themselves, they think of nothing but the present, how big it makes them and how hung over and stupid it makes them feel the next day.

Beer is a dark brew, bitter and rarely if ever drank from a bottle, it ruins the taste as Beer needs to air.

No don't get confused thinking Guinness is a Beer because it's not, no that one is a stout, a lot darker in colour, and a lot more bitter, also the best one for iron.

So next time you think about 'taking a long swig, or gulping down a mouthful of beer', think again unless you name the brand it's really a lager your dirnking, as you cannot do what you claim to have done with a Beer.

Meh. Unlike my appreciation of your other stories, Three stars.

JPB NOT BOB

She asked for it, she got it... etc. etc. etc. Thank you... great read.