All Comments on 'The Garage: Forever Yours Ch. 01'

I like the relaxed and casual way these two are getting to know each other but can't wait to read about the date!!!

I like the story and the characters. The situations are very natural and relaxed and make me want more. I just wish we had a garage like that one!! Also, the story length is just right and I also recommend people read The Harvest and any of Nomoretears work. One of my favorites.

I really love the slow buildup; I feel like I've had a nice introduction to both characters. Can't wait to see if anything happens while he's on that trip... and oooh, that first date!

Aww, and thank you for the shout-out; what a lovely way to start my morning. :) Glad I could help!

~M

Great start to the story, I'm looking forward to the next chapter :)

Totally agree with you about nomoretears stories as well, her work's great :D

I love the way you take time to build your characters. Same as you did in Blaine and Trey. Keep it up, you are a great story teller, my friend. :o)

PLZE PLZE PLZE dont wait to long on next chapter....

I like the plot and story line...but it just seems a bit 'clinical' for me. Theres no passion,sexual tension, build up of feelings between them etc. Not necessarily sex, just needs a bit of....something.

This looks like it's going to be a great story with a slow build. Chapter length is perfect.

Narration is pretty dry and emotionless... fewer unnecessary stage-directions and more description of feelings would help.

What is with this site always using a mirror to describe the main character?

If you're wondering why your story got such a low score, it's b/c there's no passion, sexual interest, or attraction to one another expressed (w/inner voice (dialogue) or aloud) by either character.

Instead what you offered us was a quick anemic invitation to dinner.

Lastly, we know a ton about Cliff - good job - while you leave Scott as just a name on the page.

Keep writing. It's interesting. You'll get better.

I enjoyed this when you first posted it and I'm rereading it now. It's sweet and romantic. Ignore the jerks who only use this site for jackoff material.

great read loving the story

This is so sweet - love the development of characters. And not necessary to have internal dialogue - that's just one way of telling a story. Can't wait to read the other chapters!

This is my second read through and I love the build up of this story so far and am now onto chapter 2 again....

A very interesting beginning with a great portrayal of the passion for cars and showing open people with a heart for their world of motoring and old cars.

I am very curious how the relationship with Cliff, Scot and other people from Garage will develop.

ps. Sorry for any errors and linguistic inaccuracies, I don't speak English.

Best regards, SissyBoy from Warsaw, Poland. 🧒🏻♀️❤️🧑🏻👨🏻🚗