All Comments on 'The Garden Shed Ch. 02'

A really good story and extremely realistic. Looking forward to the next chapter where hopefully he will fuck her brains out.

A superb story , cant wait to see if there is a pt 3 coming

Keep going. I love reading your work!

Just wanted the story to go on really so hot. The innocence of Ben and Sue reminds me of my early adventures into discovering sex with a girl.

Looking forward to more chapters.

This is an exciting and beautiful story that really captures how sibling can enjoy a mutual slow seduction. its heading in the right direction cant wait for the next chapter.

Yes . . . that was a great piece of writing, having her brother read to his horny sister and continue their exploring. The fact he read and she let him finger her then w/o panties and causing her to have a strong orgasm that soaked her panties will move them further. The fact she told him to go forward and let him get her off with a big orgasm too is good for the next step; which could be he finger fucks her faster and causes her to have a huge orgasm; it gets better each time would get them to the next level. Being he licks her to a mind blowing orgasm !! Of course, where Sue likes to jerk him off stronger each time and isn't bother by his cum load; she will now want more. Cannot wait for her to get off from oral pussy licking ! Maybe, she will follow the pattern as he makes her feel even better she might suck him off and love his cum taste ?? Cannot wait for more. Maybe Mom and Dad will trust them by going away for a night or two ?? Thank you.

Only one complaint.......this story is way too short! Need chapter 3

Love both chapters of this story.

I was surprised she came to the shed to look at the mags, rather than asking him to take it out so she could play again. But it had a very satisfactory conclusion.

I hope there are many more parts to cum.

Enjoyable read. Nice pacing and detail too. I hope you continue writing.

Wow! I've been a member here for over 10 years and I have never wanted a story to continue as much as this one! The buildup and the realism of both Ben and Sue together is amazing. We all want a sequel, and I know I'll enjoy chapter 3 even more than the first 2. Awesome writing...don't stop. You've done great writing here... continue to do so, please. I'm already wondering how happy they can make each other beyond what they've already done. Wonderful characters. I can't wait to read more!!! Easily 5 stars...providing another chapter is arriving soon. 😃

A well written story about the beginnings of sex. Thank you!

can't wait for chapter 3

Really liked this story, brought back memories of being a teenager in the 70s UK. Not with a sister but with early girlfriends.

I have never commented on a story before but I just really enjoyed your writing in both parts of this story and wanted to add to the praise...well done.

Keep it going please....

But quit using the “emm’s, err’s uhh’s” so much,

It’s understood that they are apprehensive.

Again, very realistic, so thanks for sharing.

A few tips to aid your future output. Try and keep the paragraphs down to four, max five lines. This makes the read faster and more exciting. Even if you don't think it needs a new paragraph, do it anyway.

In the dialogue, when you mention someone by name or title, you place a comma before it. Thus: "...everything ok Sue?" Should be written: "...everything ok, Sue?"

Finally, drop the 'Emmm' that you use for a pause. I kept thinking his sister's name was Emma and he was using 'Em' as a shortened version. It will be more effective if you use 'Uh' or 'Um'.

Five stars from me.

I've read this story before and thoroughly enjoyed it the first time and then now. It's just so true to life, excluding them being brother and sister, to youngsters just learning about sex and the joys it holds. Well worth reading more than once. Thanks

Loved it.

This story is so right, and so true .

Lovely exploration

I'm sure mum must know the smell of sex, unless its been a long time. Good writing though, like how you clearly show the apprehension of what they are doing.

Great storyline. Well done! Taking it slow, as you should.

Such an erotic adventure, have to read the next episode

I love sister incest. Its best story, that i read. I read more than 500.

This story is so hot, I need to take care of myself right away. What I would have done for sister like Sue.

Without doubt this chapter is the most erotic thing i have ever read. You have a gift and a way of writing that is the perfect balance between slow build up/pace and erotic text without unneeded crudity.

Well done

Only on the second part loving it especially the description of sues pussy and the way it feels I’m 53 and it took me back to my first pussy fingering the feel the smell the taste wow ty

Great stuff. Perfect read for a lazy Sunday arvo.

Even better than Chapter 1. Your description of the action is very sexy.

FULL BUSHES ARE ALWAYS THEE BEST, BUT AT LEAST IT WAS A FIVE RATEED HAIRY TRIMMMED PUSY! "Uhhh..," she uttered, as she felt my hand on the trimmed pubic hair of her mound."

This must be about the third time I have read this story and I still think it's one of the best on here. 5 stars of course.