All Comments on 'The Gear Ch. 02'

This is a good story, except for the fact there are missing words and bad grammar everywhere. Here is a sentence from near the end of this page...Few hours earlier, outside on an abandoned stood David Peterson with three black suited men.

First of all there should be a word before the word few. The comma is pointless as there is not another one, indicating a parenthetical element, in the sentence. And also WHAT is abandoned?

You really need to look for a different editor.

Editor is kind of busy with his exams. It will be uploaded soon after he proofreads it.

Next part when?

It reads as if could go for a lot more chapters than just four, hope you just keep going I'd love to read many more please.

Doing fine and have piqued our interest with the last couple of paragraphs...left a lot of options open with us knowing his old man is an ET. Looking forward to reading you next chapter...

can't wait for part 3. Also page break thing. Try next time using underscores or asterix so copy paste wont mess it up.

There is page breaks in the original word document I posted to the moderators. I dont know why they copy pasted it this way.

I'm really enjoying this story, but you REALLY need to include some form of break to differentiate betweem different parts of the story. Maybe a line, an extra space or chapter titles. This went from chatting with his sister to flirting with Tina with no distinction!

i do not know about any one else but i want to see where this goes.... it is intriguing to say the least

You can ask them now if you want. I will try to answer them without spoiling any upcoming chapters. Who knows maybe it will help me to close any plot holes when this all ends! :)

but I will await part 3 before I delve in just yet.

You may answer some of them in your next chapter.

I will say that David seems like a real bastard setting up his son like this.

This series already has a lot going for it. Very creative idea for sci Fi tech and antagonist. How you get a good editor to make a great story and epic. Also take your time with your story, enjoy it.

i will simply say wow !! .please continue this enticing series ,thank you for your time to write this. looking forward to more.