All Comments on 'The General's Wife'

Great story, worthy of more that 5 stars. The only shortcoming was that I wanted it to be longer as I enjoyed it so much.

Lol , loved your parting comment ! This was a well written mixture of fact and fiction and imo it was a joy to read . I do have a small question - is this a bit of a poke at one of the most talented quarterbacks in NFL history , the beloved John Elway ? With his auto dealerships in Colorado , the similarities end there , as his business professionalism is impeccable.

Long intro, but love the burn at the end...

Give credit where it's due:

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Your "McQueen Ranch" was based on the King Ranch, currently 850,000 acres, just southwest of Corpus Christi, next to Kingsville, Tx. Right?

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I think your "Buckman's BBQ" is probably Corkscrew BBQ, owned and operated by Will and Nichole Buckman. Their BBQ is great, but you might start a fight if you say it's the best... everybody has a favorite and they're not afraid to say so.

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Good story, very well written. I'm expecting big things from you, I'll be keeping an eye out. Thanks for posting. 5 stars.

Nicely done, and thank you for writing for us! I literally caught myself thinking “what, Juan Pablo died?”, so you’re able to write smoothly and tell a story. That alone puts you into the >4.5 area.

Ignore the legion of assholes, keyboard warriors, and other massively damaged excuses for XY chromosome, it’s just part of the territory.

Please don’t worry overly about the occasional stray into well used territory. It’s about weaving a compelling story first. You’re quite good, I hope you keep writing!

Loved it 5 stars

Thank you for posting this great story. As has been said, could have been longer because I enjoyed it so much - looks like that creative writing course from earlier has paid dividends. I’ll put you on the “follow” list so I don’t miss any stories! Thanks again

Good fun! A ridiculous plot to be sure, but when you're in Fantasyland...you write fantasy. I have to say that I do find it completely unrealistic when the whole world descends on the cheater and the cheated-on "victim" wins big. That's not the way the world works, but again....it is Fantasyland, not the world. 4*

This story feels much like the Alamo, completely fictitious and solely aimed at promoting a lie.

Really good homie! I almost bailed on the first page, I hate Hollywood and everything it stands for and about, but glad I persevered. You have a breadth of knowledge that is stunning about general things. And can use that in ways relatable to the reader.

2 nd story rocks. A star is born.

Well written, though a little long for a BTB story with close to no erotic content on an erotic stories site.

Amazing work, thank you for enjoyable read! Easy 5 stars.

ENIJOYABLE. I LOOK FORWARD TO MORE STORIES.

Amazing story. Would have loved to get a scene or two more about Jack and Maria, it would have made it that much sweeter. It's the Hollywood moment that you missed. ;-)

Gobsmacked means; "so surprised, it was as if you had been hit in the mouth". Gob means mouth and smacked means well, smacked.

Wonderful---I've enjoyed this website of stories for a while and have wandered from author to author.

I accidentally came upon the "Marriage Councilor" and thought it was so well done that I looked to find more by same Author.

Happily I came upon this Generals story. It was VERRY well done. I loved it. Every bit.

Im really peeved that you have not written more --- please hurry-hurry. I & We are waiting.

Tell us when to look THANKS for the enjoyable pleasure you have given so far. More, Soon.

I hope you continue this story. Its a wrk for of art!

So much back story available!

I can’t wait for you to get an editor who will help you fill it all in, before you finish this one!

Love it

I guess Kathy traded down with hooking up with DaBull!

5

Another great story, very enjoyable.

More please.

I enjoyed your writing

Keep up with the effort. your story telling is engaging

Superb storyline. Quite a tour-de-force in 5 pages.

Entertaining story ;-) Maria was starting to veer into super-hero terriory.

A well-written fantasy that sounds authentic, can't ask for much more than that. Welcome to the snake pit of Literotica; I hope you took the time to read the sign over the gate: "Abandon all hope ye [writers] who enter here." In the Navy we enlisted pukes called officers who began as enlisted "mustangs" and firmly believed they were the best because they knew shit from Shinola® and didn't buy the conventional wisdom that "fair is a place where men in overalls throw cow chips for distance." Do keep writing, please, and ignore the monkeys who think it's funny to throw their turds at poor saps who write stories for free.

Have to admit I enjoyed the story immensely.

All the content to drive home the plot with a parsity of drivel about bedroom scenes.

No revenge plots poorly conceived much less believable and an ending that satisfied the burning desire for extreme reactions.

Well done.

not going to comment to much other than to say enjoyed this story and I await your next 4 stars for me

From "Mother, what brings you up from Hades?" to "Meet the stupidest woman in America" turned this into a great story.

Mexicans and Spaniards do not resemble each other physically, Spaniards are Europeans, Mexicans are mostly indigenous people converted to Catholicism who adopted the Spanish culture during the colonial era. I know the cliche that exists in America that all of us who speak Spanish are the same and Spanish actors like Javier Bardem, Antonio Banderas and Penelope Cruz have to get tanned with rays to fit that stereotype, but Spaniards are not like that, obviously Spaniards from the south are more tanned than those from the north in the same way that someone from California will be more tanned than someone from Maine, but that's about it.

I myself am a Spanish girl, blonde, blue-eyed and whiter than milk. I don't understand this merging of Mexico and Spain. That strange Spexico only exists in the minds of certain ignorant Americans. Just because we speak the same language does not make us the same physically.

A North American is physically the same as a Kenyan or a Belizean because they both speak English as their official language? The same thing happens in Hispanic countries. Hispanics can be of all colors, religions and razes, Hispanic is not a race, it is a culture, and Mexico is just one more Hispanic country, it is not the standard to describe more than 20 countries in 3 different continents.

Depending on the region where they are, or the immigration flows during the colonial era, Mexico was heavily populated, so there was little European immigration, while Chile was sparsely populated and if there was much European immigration, because of that Mexico is mostly indigenous, while Chile is mostly white. That does not mean that in Mexico there are no white Mexicans or in Chile there are no chileans descendants of indigenous people, i am talking about the general aspect.

A Spaniard is no different from an Italian or a Frenchman.

What a great story. I loved the line when Maria Elena told Jack, When we’ve been married for a few years’… I can just imagine his mouth going up and down like a fish out of water. There were a couple of holes that I would have liked to have seen fleshed out more, but the overall story was great, Five star stuff. Thanks, Offkilter, I look to seeing

more of your work.

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Comment about the comment about the difference between being Mexican and Spanish. I am well aware of the difference. I have dated a woman of Castilian ancestry and also a woman from Mexico City (and one from El Salvador). The only character in the story that did not know the difference between being Spanish and Mexican was Kathy. And I believe the last line of the story explains why.

No, the one who didn't know her was you, since you described them as the same and that's why the ex-wife of the main character confused them.

Great story. Re the proofreading, try Grammerly. It's an AI-driven writing assistant that checks spelling, punctuation, grammar, tone, etc. It works in any browser window, and the Office apps. It will also suggest rewrites. It's pretty amazing if you do a lot of writing.

You are a very good writer... keep it up !

I was hoping Maria Elena’s brother, Iñigo would appear

Great story!

You tell a wonderful story and well written. 5 star

Great story, the ending was a killer, very satisfying.

Well done,well done indeed!!! 5+ stars.

FYI, the XIT was the biggest ranch....roughly 3 million acres. In Texas 800k acres is a real nice starter ranch ;-)

***** Enjoyable! Thank you

Excellent story

This was great. How about a story about a sicario? With an amazing border crossing shootout please.

Ha!

Prime! five stars from me!

Second reading and still five stars of enjoyment. Thank you.

authors should take note... negative reactions to stories are not people taking them too seriously, not all readers lack that grasp of fiction and reality... but the psychological triggers in tragic stories of infidelity, divorce and humiliation, along with good writing and characters that strike a chord, cause the reader to feel real anxiety.

Brilliant! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Very good read..

Thoroughly enjoyed it! Thank-you

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Nice!

Five Stars.

Thoroughly enjoyed this story. Great application and integration of military into this story. Having been in the Army myself as an officer, I do understand how politics works in the officer ranks. No complaints on my part. I did my job as requested/required.

This story truly portrays how some of the spouses of military personal minimize the commitment it takes to be a spouse, support the military member, and play on emotions. Simply looking for a step up, for more entitlements. I guess she got what she deserved, throwing away a soldier, Flag Officer, none the less. Serves her proper to be burnt sage brush.

Greatly enjoyed the story. Thank for the writing.

Well done. Thought the ending needed a little more text and drama. Perhaps a little more about the Bullard divorce and remorse. Danny needed to be personaly burned by Jack. A little more of Jack's romance and plans. However, last line was stupendous.

Oblique reference to Clarence Thomas was an annoying distraction that did not help the story in any way.

Mfj

Very thin... But worth a 3

If fiction can be greater than life, then this would be choice in this crazy millennia. It is a better option to entertain than listening to Republican candidates for the president of the United States. Glad that the general doesn't get sucked into current conflicts.

A thoroughly good story.

The last line is brilliant!!!

I got board before I finished the first page. If you want to write a fucking novel, find another outlet!!!

Another "expert" on the Army showing a complete lack of knowledge and total ignorance of the Army.

Entertaining!

I'm reading your stuff in the order you wrote them. This one was the best yet by far!

A great read. I especially enjoy the dialogue and the pithy bits of Texas detail. Your characterization of Fort Worth and Dallas (in this story) and Wichita Falls (in another story) are hilarious and spot on. :) 5*

Long full of details of details, I liked the plot but it was, to my view, just too wordie, .….

Like it so far and being a native Texan I do like the scene setting.

Excellent storytelling.

For the rest of the world Texas is a nowhere place full of stupid gun happy brain dead dipshits. You might want to consider that you are writing on a world wide publication.

To the Texas basher below me.... Why are you whining about Texas when we have states like CA that are going broke, mutilating children behind their parents backs and so on? Libtards.... Am I right?

I enjoyed the fantasy thoroughly! Thanks.

It seems odd to have state bashing in a forum like this, but it is obvious that neither understands that we are the UNITED States of America. United we stand and divided we will fall. Such a pity.

you are really becoming one of favorites this was another great story

Loved it well done. I wish more was focused on the Generals romance with the hot actress but it was still good.

🤣😁😉🤷👍👍👍👍💯💯💯🙋🙋good one!!!

Story - 5. Good story. Kinda weird focus on racism in Texas. Lived a lot of places. Some very serious racists in New Jersey and California. And bigots - hating other religious and ethnic group members. I actually found the south less racist/bigoted. It was there but not as mean. Some good ole boys would go much further in helping blacks in trouble than northerners, even boys with Confederate flag license plates on their front bumper. And the comment about the Supreme Court justice seemed very racist to me.

Magnificent! 10**********

That was so much fun! Thank you.

Great story, loved it first time I read it and loved it again now.

Great five ⭐️ story, for sure. Please keep writing, OK123!

Great story Definitely a 5 Star rating. Keep on writing. Possible sequel?

man that was a lot of names

How to do this.

Okay. This could be a full blown excellent story. However, you have introduced so many great characters that need quite a bit of their story told.

What I recommend is this: Even it it were to mean having others chip in to help write I would pull this story. Break out stories of the main characters, then tie in this story. I would actually flesh out this story as you have a possible great fight between Kathy and Jack in the beginning. A very romantic part with the romance of Maria and Jack. Her very great 'Hunting' and romancing of Jack would be super.

As it is it is very nice story with hints of greatness within it.

Skip all the irrelevent local stuff about Texas and the army and the rest is a good story.

Not very concise, but still a good read. 4 stars 🌟

Bill S.

A very nice bit of fluff. Very skillfully told. I would really enjoy a deeper look into most of the characters. Especially Kelsey. Thank you for your efforts on our behalf.

ok

Loved the characters, the detail, and the style. Excellent story.!

That's a pretty darn good story, as evidenced by a pretty high score for Literotica. I loved it! And the connection to Yellowstone and Taylor Sheridan is done very well. Thank You!!

Excellent. I’m reading all your work after the first one, alphabetically, pulled me in. Some do have issues, such as missing words in a couple of sentences, and using the wrong names. One thing they all have in common though, is they’re a million miles better than anything I could ever write 😜

Keep up the good work. This one’s a solid 5 stars from me.

I’m sorry, you expect to believe that a member of the US Rangers would passively accept the disrespect that arsehole Bullard showed him in his own without any form of physical retribution? Are you mad? I am assuming that u have never served let alone in Special Forces. I can assure that I have and arsehole Bullard would not be capable of any form of sex if that happened in my house. Apart from that good story.

I have to say this made excellent reading, with one caveat. As a former member of British airborne and special forces, who has served alongside 82nd Airborne and Rangers, I have to agree with the previous correspondents comments. No one I served with, British or American, would have allowed that level if disrespect to go unpunished..

While the writing was a bit thin, I found few obvious errors. Certainly nothing to downgrade a decent story from five stars.

JPB NOT BOB

This was such a fun read and there were actually a couple of LOL moments that had people looking at me in a doctors waiting room but who cares, when something is that good and that funny then you let it fly. This got five big ⭐️ and it would have been six if bit for the two facts that this should have been longer and they don’t allow more than five stars. I would even be willing to borrow one from somebody else’s story that I gave stars to but nobody got back to me on that. Thanks for everything you put into your writing, it really shows through.

Lexx

Total fun read. I’m Texan and love the take on our “history.” The burn on the Supreme Court justice was hilarious.

brillant!!!

I liked it, BUT,,, it should have been longer!!!!

Great Story, just wish it had lasted longer. Maybe write part 2,3, etc... Anywho, 5stars...

good guys were too good, bad guys were too bad. no shades of gray to build tension. otherwise entertaining

Vivat Texas ! 5*

Great story. You spent a little too much time on the cheaters and not enough time on the general and Maria. Loved the humor in the story.

As you have probably learnt in the last year, you can't proof-read your own stories. You know what's coming, so you see what is in your head, and not what's on the page.

Otherwise, I loved it, so it's a Five from me.

this story was so good, it should be novel length

second time was as good as the first,thanks .