All Comments on 'The Ghost and Bridget'

I really enjoyed this a lot. The malice of the ghost was very well portrayed, as was the inherent goodness and solidity of Brian. Despite being "on camera" the most, Bridget's character was not drawn as well. That lack of depth (even in an obviously shallow person) took away from her transformation. Of course, that's just my opinion.

On a separate matter, this story needs a cleanup in the grammar and spelling department. That's one of my pet peeves.

Hi, Just wanted to say that I completely agree about the grammar and misspells. It really does distract from the story. I went over this several times and thought that I'd caught most of it. Then I read it on line and was sad to see so many. I'm hoping I can fix it up and resubmit. Til then, thank you for your feedback on the characters. I'm happy you enjoyed it.

Yes, usually bad grammar can distract you and halt your progress through the story. Regardless, the story was wonderful. The stories of each individual are enough to immerse you but still remain mysterious. The only criticism I can give is that the story should start off with Derek watching her in the bar, trying to get her attention, this way you understand his obsession and hostility toward her :) The sex was written extremely well but the emotion portrayed is magnificent! You should seriously consider publishing a book maybe along the lines of Mills & Boon Publishing. - Just don't forget to hire a proof reader ;) -

Wow I love it