All Comments on 'The Girl from Nepal Ch. 01'

I'm not sure why all the positive comments have been left, this is not good story writing. The characters are paper thin and the plot is rushed. Where are the emotions? Where is the feeling? Who are these people?

Just because it's free doesn't mean it's good.

Great story. I love your style of writing and I can't wait to read more.

This is a very good beginning... I would love to read more. Very intresting storyline. I must admit, I never thought a story like this would capture my attention but you balance the computer and human natures in BES so well that it is a wonderful read.

I absolutely love your stories! Keep up the good work! I can't wait to find out how this one ends :D

like all your stories this one is absolutely wonderful so far..I only wish you had more time to write the rest of the chapters needed to finish this story and the others...please write more soon I keep checking daily..:P

I have loved these first two chapters. Please I cant wait till I read what happens next. This is a very good and unique story.

Good story with an original concept, and so far nicely executed. I'm looking forward to more. Makes me want to read your other stories.

Love the new story! Keep the chapters flowing!

So we know that BES has a techno-organic body and if he has blood then does he have full reproductive capabilities? What better way to ensure that BES protects her then to have a metaphorical Cylon child.

Even our heroine's name and her home offers us such lovely fantasy.."Nepal and Jagati" and a cyborg too! You offer us

richness of characters and places and emotions. I look forward to Ch Two with anticipation! Thank you!

wonderful chapter . . I am looking forward to more :-D

i love it! i'm looking forward to seeing how this story unfolds!

Love it! Cant wait for the next chapter Thanks again!

awsum start...cant wait for the next chapter...dont make us wait!!!!