All Comments on 'The Girl Next Door Pt. 03'

I love your writing. I love the slow relationship building. I think it might help if you make the sections a little longer. They seem to just cut off completely if that makes sense. Looking forward to seeing what else you write.

I really love reading these types of stories, and Erin is right she should talk to Gabs and find out how she really feels about Gracie can't wait for the next part

Interesting ideas and sub plots woven through this story. My only suggestion is that you don't over cook the teenage angst aspects. The tension between Gabs and Gracie is already there. Inventing more and move obstacles to their relationship could bog the action down. I don't know where you're going with the evil telepathic Dominatrix and Gracie, but if handled correctly it could really add some eroticism to a fairly vanilla lesbian love story. I'm hopefully optimistic about this universe being something special.

More darlin. You have an amazing story here. Give us more lol.

So glad Gracie got saved. You really had me worried. Everything lovable again. Whoop whoop!

It’s a lovely story , well written ..but can please you make the chapters longer than this ?

Gracie definitely needs to talk to Gab. They would be cute together. Nice job tho, 👍

I hope you’re self-isolating and healthy so we can get the next chapter ASAP! Thanks for such a different kind of story. I love the hero fantasy theme. Great work.

sad.