All Comments on 'The Halloween Mask'

This is not an erotic story.

Play by play of danving, touching, and kissing was so erotic. Best Halloween sort ever on Literotica.

Where's the continuation, it's not complete???

A good lead up, but incomplete.

I know how I would finish it, but this is not my story. You need to finish it.

(More story = more stars)

Very hot. I hope you continue it. 5 stars

I am surprised you didn't let him get the pussy before you exposed him

Great Start!

That’s it not more ,,, just a kiss

First time in 25 years on here I have given a story a ZERO rating.

1. Story line seemed rather juvenile.

2. There was no excitement or eroticism at all.

3. Stopped the story is the strangest place.

Not much though went into this story, and it didn't it state this was a multipart story or even just a single sequel....

Ugh. Swing and a miss. Don’t bother writing if you can’t finish the story. You started the character development and hinted at a plot but shut down the story before the first commercial break… not sexy, cliche beginning, no middle, no climax, no conclusion. Ima guessing you can figure out how I’m voting.

Nice start to a story. But it isn't much of a story as it is currently written.

Nice start, but we need more, he must make love to her all night, many times, fill her pussy with his cum and then...

Great start....you need to finish it.

This is a good start to a larger story. Keep up the good work.

Great so far

If this is a setup for another chapter, good. Otherwise...

Great start. Can’t wait to see where you go with this story!

Great start! Can’t wait to see where you go with this story.

This was a giant cock tease, felt like reading a preview for a multi part series, definitely new more chapters atlest two to ten more.

This is not even a story

Way too short, it could have gone on, after his discovery, either keeping it quiet, or having her welcome it even knowing. Needs a part 2 in either direction.

It’s a great setup to erotic story. Please finish

I gave you 2 stars because the story info says "accidental hook-up"... There was no hook-up though, unless you're 12 and think kissing a girl is actually a hook-up. It was also way, way, way too short.

Now to say that, I will also say that you have talent from what I have seen. Your spelling is good and your grammar skills are on point. You should NEVER start your writing career on unfinished stories though. This feels rushed to publication. You should take it down until you finish is, and publish it all at once. I don't understand why people feel it's ok to publish in chapters. Write it out, and then publish it. You wouldn't publish a book or research paper until it had a conclusion.

Thank you for all the comments! I'm a long time reader, but have never had the time/courage to write before. I have a Part 2 in mind that should address the lack of sex in this chapter, but wanted to put this out first in time for Halloween.

Good story so far. Hope you will write more.

Good start

Part 2 please.

Good start. You do need an editor, but you tell a good tale.

Fun read. I was really getting into it. I hope you write more. Like someone else said either a direction if she didn’t hear what he gasped and the anonymity continues and he just keeps going or maybe They keep pretending or something. Atleast for me part of the “fun” is them not knowing it always sucks in a story when they figure it out and bam it’s normalcy all of a sudden.

Started off well - you describe the setting nicely but the end seems very abrupt. Perhaps working with an editor may help a lot? Not sure if this is in the right category either

Great story, I hope there’s more.

A promising start,do continue

I would indeed want more! Let's hope she doesn't find out it's her son.

more more more

Must have a part 2 ... MUST HAVE

That I can't wait for Part 2!!!!

A "Part 2" is definitely called for! Great cliffhanger, but cliffhangers must always be resolved. How Mom reacts is everything. Being appalled at the discovery, and/or a realistic battle with temptation, a decision with consequences, and some serious self-questioning are in order, although other possibilities exist which will require a much greater suspension of disbelief by the readers.

Ehh, would've been better if only he was aware after the fact.

Too short

No ending