All Comments on 'The Halloween Party'

Not a bad start. Felt it was too short though.

4 stars.

U need to have get another encounter with her. Where she reveals a little more about herself

So she knew who he was (Rod), but he had no clue who she was? Interesting.

Your story has got a Penthouse* Letters quality to it. It needs more editing. But the mistakes are also strangely endearing.

*Penthouse was a Men’s Magazine. Dirtier than Playboy. Not as actively filthy as Oui or Hustler. The Penthouse Letters to the Editor read like your story. Zipless Füx from Double-D D-DreamGirls!