by Alca
For a first story you knocked it out of the park. Wish I could give you more than five stars.
Love this story, would this be a autobiography of your self? If yes send me a note.
Cute ending, hot F’ing in the middle, nice slow build at beginning. Great read … 5 stars!
By far the best story I’ve ever read on here. First comment I’ve ever left too it was that good
YES! Great job! You did a great job of building the sexual tension. All of the hate & lust felt so genuine.
I can only second what the others have been saying. WONDERFUL. You maintained the intensity of a first coupling through to a temporary conclusion with knowledge certain that they would live to fuck again, and again, and again.
This is an amazing story. Really hot & could use many sequels. My only question is why it’s in the “First time” category. Neither lover is a virgin(as you made very clear!), nor did they try anything that one of them hadn’t tried before. One could make a case for this as an “erotic couplings “ tale, but I would argue for this being in the Non-Consent/ Reluctance category—not as a de facto rape story(non-consent), but as a rare example of a true reluctance story—she didn’t start out wanting the hateful, but was persuaded & then a VERY willing participant!! But regardless of category, this was a great read.
Hi! Thank you everyone for the great comments, I really appreciate them. I’m writing the second chapter as we speak and hope to have it up soon. For the person that commented on the “first time” category, you are right. I misinterpreted the categories. I’ve done my homework now and will put it in the correct one next time. However, your comment on how it was a rare example of true reluctance was very much appreciated. Thank you!
As a female reading this - holy crap! You have mad skills! I was very turned on... wow... Thanks for a really good morning hahaha!!! I hope you keep writing!
Amazing story, I loved the back and forth banter they had going, the cockiness and the confidence they both showed and then they give in to the sexual attraction. You are a talented writer and this was keeping me on the edge of my seat, it was sexy, entertaining and well written. Knowing you’re doing a continuation of this just has me excited to see what happens next, this is a great story telling trait to have, to keep listeners on the edge of the seat. Well done. You did a wonderful job and you are talented x
You only got me for Page 1.
I can't count ALL the punctuation mistakes, & WTH does "All of nothing" mean?!