All Comments on 'The Heart is a Poor Judge Ch. 05'

Thanks for breaking the recent sequence of poor plots and even poorer writing here on Lit. I wish all of the good writers such as yourself would get together and agree that one of you will post at least once a week.

I let my toast go cold while I read this chapter. Couldn’t stop reading!

Page 3 of Part 5 and we finally get a randy part. It was well worth the wait, but not really why I kidboise stories anymore. I am so happy that he is still publishing here. His writing has matured far beyond anything else on this site. Please let us know when this is available in Kindle form. It is worth the $5 (or more) to be able to flip back and forth. I was hoping Chickadee's "alrights" wouldn't make it into the new story, but I am just going to have to get over my myself. Also, I am forever a Chickadevotee. I am curious about the difference between the two stories-- a new editor or more concerted effort to tighten the writing by the author? This is some really beautiful writing. Miguel and Gabe are not macho bros. It wearying to always be reading stories that involve what seems like two straight guys getting together. That said, Miguel is so hot I had to remind myself to breath.

That line and the sentence surrounding it—fucking beautiful.

have you ever seen the babadook? this story reminds me of the babadook.

Why are the ratings for this so low? This series and Chickadee are far better written than many of the stories with higher ratings. Is someone down voting? What is up?

Favorite line: " Perhaps Gabe had tried one too many times to vindicate the evil actions of a character he had grown fond of." If that doesn't say sit down and shut up. Five times five stars

"...the middle line in a strange haiku: I know how you got the scar." So pleased to see an Anonymous commenter was caught by this line three years before I was! Also pleased to start this read when it's a completed work. Outstanding completed work. Outstanding