All Comments on 'The Helldesk Ch. 01'

Thanks for all the ratings, not too bad for a first effort!

Ch. 02 should be up by Monday 6/19/17

Chapter 02 has been submitted for publication!

I stopped reading after this:

"caught me gleefully anticipating my all too imminent early departure to ease my worldly worries with a couple of rather superior libatory concoctions at a fancy new bar that had recently opened downtown."

Pretty bad

@Anonymous - "I stopped reading after this:"

Thanks for the note. In re-reading it's definitely clunky, and whilst I was trying to set the tone for The Admin as being a bit of a pretentious prick, this just doesn't read well, so it's been trimmed and resubmitted.

I'm happy I found this story. Off to chapter 2!

Loved it