All Comments on 'The Honey Dew List'

Two paragraphs in and I’m done. Protagonist is a whiny little faggot, and his wife/GF is completely unrealistic and pandering. Cringe. Do you think real people who aren’t insane think, act, or talk like this?

Im commenting on the first chapter... However i made it all they way to chapter 5..... None of the people in this story are sane... The dialog is cringy..... Sorry i try to give series a chance but the political view that paints everyone not left of the party lines as crazy evil fucks is flawed....

So bad it's almost comedic...

WTF!!!!

You are much better than this. I've enjoyed many of your stories in the past, but this is something else. I only made it halfway down page 1 before I had to comment. I am going to go back and try to read this, but from the comments below I doubt I'll be successful. This compulsion you have given the girlfriend and her 'honey do' lists is comedic, pandering, and just crazy. I hope there will be some kind of reasonable explanation very soon. Then there is the MC's readiness to comply mere seconds after his rant about them and her. I fear this is going to be a strange crazy tale that will distract me from any enjoyment it may contain.

ok finished this part.

It's still crazy and convoluted, still not your best work, but its not as bad as I first thought. Just a crazy way to get to the good stuff, or so I hope.

You yadda yadda'd past the threesome with the girlfriend, sister, and mother? Odd choice.

Your dialogue is a bit stilted - no one talks like that for the most part, and bringing in religion felt like a random addition that didn't add anything to the story.