All Comments on 'The Hunting Trip'

An editor could have helped; you used too many commas.

Well it looks like he is going to have to track her down. There isn't any way he can let her just walk away from him.

This is a good story, and hope to find out what happens... Rich

Comments much appreciated. I wrote this one while half asleep. Yeah too many comma's, but I've never stood too much on the formality of specific rules, when there is a story to be told. The essence of the story is what is most important.

This one won't have a sequel though. It's meant to be exactly what it is. The girl wanted something, she got it.

The hardest part is trying to think of an idea for what to write next.