All Comments on 'The Hypnotist Ch. 01'

Welcome back after an apparent 5 year rest. The flow is delightful and the twist at the end sets up a nice "complication" for the journey.

Welcome back to one of my favorite authors. Mike in Missouri

have read all your stories two or three times. you haven't lost anything in interim from what i read today. loved it.

Who did he play golf with??? Janice or Diane---- jumped names back and forth many times.

Yes, good to see you back.

Good story, however, you could use a little better proof reading...

"Her PUBLIC POUND began to slowly raise off the sofa…"

Maybe ... pubic mound instead.

You know, just the little things!

Keep 'em coming.

Dave

'Nuff said - NOT !!! Write the sequel, PLEASE.

I hope you will finish this one.

Boyd

That's not right. You gotta give us an ending.

It's really disappointing that after two and a half years, the next chapter still hasn't been posted. Also, for the life of me, I can't understand why so many of the authors who post to this site have such a tendency to confuse and transpose characters, and in some cases, completely rename one in the middle of a story. Dinsmore is not the only guilty party. Far from it. I've lost count of how many times I've found similar errors in other writers' stories, even when the author gives credit to one or more editors. Does anyone proof-read these submissions before they're posted? Perhaps I'm a bit obsessive, but I can't even make myself send a text message without doing an error check.

Sorry for the rant, but I think it's just tragic that an otherwise great story like this one is marred with easily preventable mistakes.

More from you would be very well received. You still out there??

second that

And not on the tour?

That is almost as bad as leaving this hanging.

How she reacts to the revelation should be fun.

Your a very good story teller. Would love to read more.