All Comments on 'The Inevitable Barrier Ch. 02: The Fallout'

A progression in the true spirit of part 1, lots of intel and lots of funny Aussie dialog spiced with sexy action and greenery. The only difference this time is the tough to follow timeline, it seems that it's all over the place and jumps from present to past and back again within the same paragraph. It doesn't take away from the whole experience but it sure makes it harder to follow it all, so maybe thing about separating it a bit more clearly (lines, dots, those pretty signs you use here and there...) and you'll do a fine job with the story.

Again I gave you 4* and now await the next chapter which promises a lot of fun for everyone!

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