All Comments on 'The Infinite Bk. 01 Ch. 04'

Good world building. Let's see where you go from here.

More please

Hi. Thanks for a great story. Well written and a good tempo. I am really enjoying the shit out of it. Can't wait for the next chapter. You, my friend, are awesome. Bless you.

This is a great story! I can't wait for the next installment

Nice to know he got some stuff of his chest at least. I thought tin was going to die but I'm glad to be wrong.

I really have no notes for you. You've got me looking forward to every chapter.

- Aardie

You crafted this so visually perfect. I cant wait to read more.

Love the writing and characters, but where is it going. It needs a purpose which is detracting from the story. Hopefully you bring it in the next part or it just becomes a boring soapie. Well written but no reason to read it.

I didn't think this chapter added anything to the story, I hope the author hasn't ran out of ideas already, this has the makings of a great story.

The way you have developed this story and the characters in it have me awaiting the next portion of your tale with anticipation.

Thank you for sharing this with all of us.

Please continue.. maybe a little more depth on the monsters.. and his surroundings

"Vide Cor Meum" is breathtaking! I'd never heard it before. Parts of it remind me of Morten Lauridsen's "O Magnum Mysterium" -- they're both the kind of music that is worth sitting and giving all your focus to as you listen instead of multitasking with it on in the background. It's the kind that will bring a tear to your eye. What a beautiful thing for Noah to introduce to Tin while she was suffering through illness.

Thank you for the depths of emotion you're taking this piece to, not just with the music but in so many character interactions. It's always a bonus when a great story also introduces me to great music!

Revelations aplenty. Interesting backstory.

Small observation: You have used the word 'lied' several times, in this and previous chapters, when the correct word should have been 'laid'. This is not an uncommon error, just something I thought you might want to be aware of. Googling the definitions of each can give you a sense of the 'proper' usage.

Love the story! Looking forward to future chapters.

Interesting story, very strange, unusual take on a fantasy.

Make a tv series this is really good.

Love the story keep at it!

Great story, this is like real life. Keep it up. I will read.

I am enjoying this, and I like the premise of him living many different lives/timelines. I imagine it will be hard to keep all the implications blurred and maintain this illusion. Case in point is one of the last paragraphs:

"So Noah regaled her, telling her what it was like to grow up being poor, what it was like to grow up being rich. He recalled fond memories of his siblings and holidays as an only child. Noah told her how his parents loved and supported him, then how they screamed and beat him. He described the modern world's technology and the fight for survival in the apocalypse aftermath."

Here, he seems to describe one life, but when read carefully, it shows knowledge of multiple lives. Very clever.

You know, it seems a little silly to rank on RPG based fantasy when you can't seem to avoid it yourself. That said, thanks for the free read, it is way above average for Literotica.