All Comments on 'The Internship Ch. 03'

Keep up the good work

I love this story. This episode didn't have enough sex, but you're developing a very interesting story with myriad possibilities. Keep it up. I question Dave meeting Peggy in Durham. I thought he was on some big out of town meeting. His dealerships are in Raleigh, which is right next door. Are you saying his "travel" is a subterfuge of some kind and he's really right in town?

Shower sex and phone sex in the same chapter? Hell yes! And they were both smokin' hot. I especially liked the moment in the shower where Stacey reminds her dad they shouldn't be doing this. But sex aside, this is an engrossing tale. I enjoyed getting more background on Fred and Joyce, and of course I'm terribly curious about Dave's friendship with Fred and who's been in that office. Looking forward to more!

Thanks 3Day. I envisioned Dave using Durham as a base to visit western part of state. And yes, this is a plot-driven chapter, a kind of bridge in the middle to last two chapters. Thanks for your comments!

Dear Flower,

The sex was HOT! Particularly the shower scene. And I love the way you have developed the intrigue in this story. Please continue with your very talented writing. There are a lot of moving parts, but you are doing a great job of keeping us informed of who is alligned with whom. Love the suspicious phone call Fred gets out on his balcony at the start of this chapter. Nice tease; I wonder who he was talking to ... hmm!

Love your writing and especially the way your nasty mind works; very erotic and sensual.

Oz

I want more this is suspenseful and sexual all the right stuff!!

I'm in love and can't wait to read more

I'm more into the fraud than the sex <3 love it!!

I'm completely hooked!! The suspense, the taboo relationship.....I'm in love. More, please, more!

The fact that your story flows and has a plot and a decent storyline makes this a pleasure to read

Looking forward to what Stacey finds out next

Pretty fucking engaging story telling - this could get nicely stretched out for at least another half a dozen chapters with Stacey honing her seductress skills on the boys ( and girls?) in the accounting and IT departments - with Daddy's approval, of course

I'm really looking forward to reading about how Dave and Stacey are able to catch Paula, Kathy and Fred of wrongdoing and making their lives miserable. Making a sex tape of the dirty 3 and putting it on the internet for the whole world to see would be good. But then also including Joyce in Dave and Stacey's "sexy" time would also be outstanding. Of course....I would not be opposed to Paula, Kathy and Fred getting beaten, violated and thrown in prison where they can relive the experience every day of their lives. :)

Your additon of Margaret "Peggy" Sanford is interesting. I recall her from a previous storyline by (possibly) another author, including her backstory of how she ended up in Raleigh. If I am correct that her character is from another author, then I hope you will properly credit said author. That being stated, I think the addition of Peggy's (and possibly her son's) character(s) could add an extra twist, not just to the embezzelment plot, but also to Dave and Stacey's relationship.

(P.S. If the story regarding Peggy and her son was yours, then that brings up another question: why isn't that story still listed on the Sories/Poems page of your profile?)

Actually, include chapters one and two,

I love it like a Bond story, many characters

invovled and key to the plot. Waiting on the

next entry.....

You know, at the risk of pissing off a lot of members, this is the kind of story that is typically only written by women - men tend to just go for the Wham! Bam! Thank you, ma'am! stories with almost zero plot beyond the Happy Ending... Now don't get me wrong, I'm not saying the latter is a bad thing - there are PLENTY of those stories that are well-written and SMOKING hot, but... This story has an interesting subplot which makes the main characters more REAL, they aren't just a man and his daughter having nasty hot incest, they are humans with lives outside the house/bed that are interesting and important to them. They don't just fuck all the time, they study, do homework, prepare for business trips, etc etc etc. The thing I love about this storyline you've got going, Flower, is that the bond and relationship between Dave and Stacey is sooooo romantic, while still being sooooo smoking HOT! I love the way these two people adore each other and how excited they are about their relationship, without the need to be stereotypically slutty/raunchy all the time. I, personally, am hoping there will NOT be a third, let alone fourth person brought into their loving relationship - the concept of three people as equal partners in a marriage/love affair is a myth, someone always gets left out, and if it's Joyce, she will just leave, but if it's Stacey [in the guise of breaking the incestuous relationship and pairing her up, eventually, with someone more age appropriate, blah blah bullshit], then all THESE chapters were for were for SEX. This story is far too well-done to be reduced to just sex, come on. Dave and Stacey are IN LOVE and want to be together FOREVER. This is fantasy, the incestuous part makes it hot, and the FANTASY part makes it OK for us to root for the incestuous pair to live happily ever after, dammit! hahaha

Can't wait for more, and man-oh-man, I sure am gonna love seeing Fred, Paula, and Kathy get busted and punished!! Is there a way to get notifications when you post your next chapter, I wonder? :)

Yes, Miss Peggy Sanford is a character from another story, used with permission of the author. Thanks for the astute catch!

something more than WAM BAM. I think Im a 51% fan of daddy daughter 49% fan of the story. that may change. :-)

Honestly, the sex may be good, but the story is great! I really want to see how this turns out. Please do continue it! Yes, I am male, and I'm still loving this story.

I'm really into this story and I cant wait to see how it turns out.

Glad its just not some sappy daddy/daughter love story. Its more than that. There's an actual problem in the story that doesn't just involved the incestuous couple which I think is great and adds spice to a great story.

I really hope Fred gets what's coming to him!