All Comments on 'The Iron Shop Ch. 05'

like the series,but last chapter seemed hurried. relax the pace and continue as before. you write well.

maybe you should pump yourself...lol

This one seems... rather rushed.

I also wonder if it needs to go in this direction. But, I suppose it's something to explore.

I think what I personally would like from here is a renewed emphasis on their muscles. If it were me I'd make him and his grandmother start wrestling, arm wrestling... take part in some small-town telethon where they have to do tug-of-war or something, either on the same team or against each other... etc.

I'm also thinking the grandmother should get a rival of some sort, someone who can challenge her physically, so that they can engage in some contest and the grandson roots for her.

But I'm still curious to see where you're going to take it.

In terms of copyediting I have a notion that when "grandma" is used as a moniker rather than a generic denotative term, it ought to be capitalized... that's the rule I generally follow, anyway.

Ane miles to go before I sleep............

Love your stories

Astounding story.

Awesome, wishing for most amazing chapters, what a knockout grandmother

This needs a sequel... Probably your best story to date