All Comments on 'The Job Pt. 04'

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AnonymousAnonymous4 months ago

@muddywan I love that response, bless you -NotPoto

AnonymousAnonymous5 months ago

Tale of an assassin with a heart of gold and an amorous dispensation. Never backs down from any encounter, killing or drilling, so long as it's instigated by the opposite party. Great story so far.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

I'm amazed at the imagination and serendipitous adventurous tale thats a bit of a novel 'buddy' romance. (Like a hit man's 007?)

Author has 'heart' and compassion, which is unusual for a professional 'mechanic'. ('just the facts, ma'am...)

dgfergiedgfergieover 1 year ago

The justice couple forages on to find the self centered and very selfish father. Onward..........

muddywanmuddywanalmost 2 years ago

spoiled*...and no they didn't!

WoodencavWoodencavalmost 2 years ago

Unfortunately a number of spelling and grammatical errors spoilt this, a good storey otherwise. ⭐️⭐️⭐️

dgfergiedgfergieover 2 years ago

Still going and still fun the second time around and once again Kudos to our editor who spent more time on the story than did our author.

Geon54Geon54almost 6 years ago
Sunday service

(revisiting some favorites) If I remember correctly, the tire replacement was a Sunday (morning) job. Jayden rolled into Evansville "just before the dinner hour" later that day. After stopping for a steak, he encounters the unmarked UPS truck making a delivery "as night began to fall". It strikes me that pretending to make a UPS type delivery on a Sunday night would have been pretty stupid cover for any professional hitman. Now, if it had been a pizza delivery truck, that scene could play out pretty much as written (minus clipboard). Hell, you wouldn't even need a truck. A car with removable "Joe's Pizza!" signage would fill the bill and be a lot easier to acquire/convert/dispose of.

TheOldRomanticTheOldRomanticalmost 7 years ago
Tragic ending for Pat

Sad, really sad ending for Pat...

Maybe new horizons for Jayden, Bev and Susan?

5 * stars for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.

Horseman68Horseman68almost 8 years ago
Absorbing Story.

Exciting also. No idea how this will end, but hoping for the best for these characters.

RB1947RB1947about 8 years ago
I forgot

how good this story really is. Been a while since I last read it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Wild ride so far

I have never commented before finishing a story, but I am enjoying this so much that I though I should. I am quite amazed at where this story has gone so far and I am sure that Jayden is going to end up with someone at the end. I thought I knew who at the beginning but now I am not so sure.

Yoshi

sissys_BFsissys_BFover 8 years ago

Great story so far!

rightbankrightbankalmost 9 years ago
each chapter is so different

so too are the women

LeFrog08LeFrog08over 9 years ago
Wow! This is excellent!

Each chapter gets better. These characters are very fascinating.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Still great...

Loving this series!

Sad to lose the mum though...

C

SplitAcesSplitAcesover 9 years ago
Outstanding

Your character development paints a clear picture in my mind's eye. Moreover, I like your characters; which is an absolute necessity for me to enjoy the story. It also helps to have such a great plot! 5 stars.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Loving It!

So very captivating. Great charecter development and motivation. Looking forward to where this is headed. Finding it difficult to wait for new chapters.

bearsladybearsladyover 9 years ago

Nice twist thrown in this morning. And the tension bumps up several levels. Nicely done.

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