All Comments on 'The Keeper Ch. 12-13'

Great storyline, but I wish the chapters were more than one or two pages long. Keep up the good work.

Enjoying it, but chapters are far too short

Great story, but chapters are to short. A longer chapter would have really appreciated.

Thank you for the series, I hope it keeps going.

Keep this one coming but keep the quality up also. This is really good. Yes the chapters are too short but beggars can’t be choosers. Quality is most important.

It seems like you've submitted the same chapter again. I've already read this one, but it appears to have been published just today. Then again I see the comments from two days ago. Something went wrong.

You sure are milking the tits off of this thing, writing one page and calling it two chapters!

This was in the new stories section two days ago but never showed against author, suspect it was added again by system to fix it to the author hence it looks ad if duplicate posting. Just in case anyone else notices.

Would recommend inputting no less than 6 of these chapters together. Great story, but recommend longer so you give your audience time to build up emotional attachments. I recommend this because the quality you have provided so far shows care and consideration. This is just a significant way to push to the next level.

"The Goddess had marked him as her own." Dang, now that was powerful. Well done. I actually shivered.

Everyone complains about the chapter. Because I have come late to the party, the breaks seem perfect.

Traumatic reading, but this chapter had to stand alone in order to make the content stand out in stark relief and make it memorable. Proper job CharlyYoung.

Oh blessed Mother of all, poor Lachlan... These little peaks that you keep giving of him has really gotten my interest but your doing it in such a way that it's almost a sweet torture. Whoever Lachlan is, he's more than a mundane and I need to know more of who he really is...

You are one of those authors that can draw a person into the story and world that's developing, especially with certain characters. I look forward to be drawn into your story. Well done.