All Comments on 'The Kineticist Ch. 03'

This is really compelling - can't wait to read more! Massively awesome work!

I loved it but I only gave it 3 stars on account of it being so short.

Thank you all for the support you have shown.

In responce to the comments and feedback i have received, I'll make sure I do my best to incorporate what I can.

As for length, iI am currently trying to stay consistent with somewhere around the average chapter length of book publication. I'll play with the length in the next chapter. What needs to be considered is rate of output and quality verse what the reader base feels is comfortable.

Anyone who reads this please either comment or message me with what kind of length you would like to see.

I've read massive slabs of stories that were like 200k words on here and it took me a few days to digest it and it wasn't very accessible in terms of place finding.

Again, I welcome any and all feedback. Don't be shy to speak your mind! We are a community.

However you decide to proceed, write more! :)

It needs editing though, too many incorrectly used words or spelling errors that mean you have to try and guess which word should be used. This applies to the three instalments to date, not just part three. e.g. chaffing (pt. 1) when you meant chafing, to rub and make sore. "Shined" when you meant the past tense of shine which is "shone".

Please don't let this minor negative criticism stop you from continuing with a well planned and executed story!

Loving the story so far and I am exited to see where it leads. For future chapters, maybe consider some kind of visual que to indicate a change in perspective. Something like a line across the page when you switch from Kara's to Kyle's perspective would make those transitions a little cleaner and easier to follow, especially if you add more character perspectives in the future.

Keep up the good work!

Normally I add a page break when the chapter splits. Thanks for letting me know! I'll add a note for the mods to make sure it stays in.

You have a great way of telling a story!

Keep on (and get some more help with spellchecking ;-)

Love your stories, keep up with both of them, only very few spelling errors etc, but that dont take anything away from the stories you write. They are excellent. Thank you.

If it’d known it was a work in progress I would have started a different series