All Comments on 'The Lab Assistant'

by lonelyluca

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Nnnelson about 2 years ago

Bravo. Definitely need another chapter!

Forestgodling about 2 years ago

Hot, but needs an editor. Little bits of things like pronoun switching and a missed position indicator (pretty sure you had him enter her from behind but never 'moved' her from when she was face up. Sort of thing it's hard to catch in your own writing.

That said, great story! Thanks for sharing it.