by Lycandope
Did the pacing work out okay? Working on tone and style and stuff. Purposefully made thus chapter grim and depressed.
This chapter does an excellent job of conveying the confusion and fog that lily is experiencing due to her hunger. ( that's what it is right?) very well done, keep up the good work.
I think the pacing is about right for stressing the horror of erotic horror, there's clearly a very interesting thread here about the horror of losing oneself. I'm really looking forward to more!
I hope she realizes she will need to be above suspicion to the police
she ignores things totally like the crow, and is rather dumb on putting simple patterns together.... perhaps if she ate and drank she would still have lost fat
at the rate she is starved and thus ugly she should have a multiple submissive men orgy, so they are tied down
seems to me one or both parents were supernatural but why is the voice in her head both male and unhelpful... you'd think he'd explain what she is and what she needs to do to live and gain powers and be beautiful