All Comments on 'The Last 24 Hours Ch. 04'

Rammed his car and then knocked him out. What next? A hefty knee to the groin? Accidental, of course!

This girl is dangerous.

Ah, but we know she loves him. I'm wondering why it has to be forced from her?

Have no idea where you're going with this, at this time.

and this causes me to wait too long to see what is going to happen next. Other then that, so far it's great.

What can I say but a good story more please

Excellent srory so far! More!!!

Just read the first 4 chapters of your story - it's great. Different than the usual Literotica writing. Now I'll start the next few.....keep it up

this, it's an excellent story line. I have a problem with Beth and the way the author is portraying her. The girl is an Amazon with long red hair and beautiful blue eyes who can't stop crying, tripping over her own feet and beating up on the hero. She seems like a sissy with no mind and no spine. I hope you plan on fixing that.

I give you a score of a 1000 points for realism and correct spelling and punctuation.

Atlanta,Ga

Thanks for the offering.

whatta screwed up chapter this is.

will u be able to stay on track finish this,

part 1 =3 stars

part 2 =5 stars

part 3 = 2 stars.

I liked part 1 and gave it a five chapters 2 & 3 added nothing to the story. . You could have gone directly to the DNA test to actually continue the actual story..

Dialogue and plot line getting convaluted and weird

This splitting the story into ridiculously tiny bits is making me nuts.

Well, I am enjoying the back and forth dialog between Beth and Josh. THere is something going on and would like for Beth to finally get over what she wants. Josh knows and tells him that he needs to be careful with her. So far one of the best stories of compassion I have had the pleasure of reading.

"They didn't think I had a concussion" - If you get knocked out by blunt force trauma to the head, by definition you had a concussion. In some grading scales, automatically a higher grade as well. Might want to edit that part.

One page chapters are extremely irritating.