All Comments on 'The Last Princess of Lorrea Ch. 01'

by long_legs2u

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KittenCuddlerKittenCuddlerover 10 years ago
Great start!

Please continue this ;-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Great

An amazing beginning. It certainly pulled at my heart strings. I love the patriotism!

long_legs2ulong_legs2uover 10 years agoAuthor
Thanks

I posted part one and two on the same day, but so far only one part has popped up.

Hope you enjoy it and keep reading as I post more! (I've written 3 more chapters).

FA_JFFA_JFover 10 years ago

Strong set up. Look forward to more.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Great

Can't wait to read more

SweetRapunzelSweetRapunzelover 10 years ago
:)

Good start! Hope for the next ch. soon.

inspector123inspector123over 10 years ago
Good start

Looking forward to chapter 2.

MaynessMaynessover 10 years ago

Started strongly setting the stage, good character base for the princess. Looking forward to the next chapter. Well done.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

A good start. I can't wait to see where you take this. I really like that the princess is a bit of a tomboy.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Good premise

Very interesting. Hope to see more soon.

long_legs2ulong_legs2uover 10 years agoAuthor
Thank you

Thanks for all the kind words. I posted part 3 and 4 today... so they should pop up here sometime before Christmas :) Nah, hopefully in about a week or two, if I judge the amount of time that it took the 1st part to be published (the second was submitted that same day and is still "pending").

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Nice story, sort out your narrator perepective

It starts off with a first person narrator and then goes to third - you really can't do this, it spoiled it for me.

josephstevensjosephstevensover 10 years ago
Nice Start!

This has got the makings of a good series....can't wait! I love feisty females!

long_legs2ulong_legs2uover 10 years agoAuthor
Happy that you guys like it!

I've just finished chapter6... posted it along with 5 tonight so it should pop up within 2 weeks (still waiting for chap 3 and 4 to show up too)

AMHJ89AMHJ89over 10 years ago

Love the story.. love that she isn't just a weak defenseless princess and jealous of the fact that she's a proficient with a bow and arrow.. a talent I hope to gain myself

didntseeuxtheredidntseeuxthereover 10 years ago
Love it!!!

I just found this and I am so excited for more! Please keep

Up the good work!

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
sounds familiar

In addition to the title, I can see the beginning of this sorry was also somewhat inspired by The Last Tritan. You seem to be a good writer, why not create a more unique premise.

evonnaevonnaabout 10 years ago
good start.

our heroine has quite a responsibility on her shoulders, what with the honor of her family and country.. looking forward to reading more... i'm not bothered by the similarities to other stories like Last Tritan or The Priestess, this is quite a popular type of premise after all, and very few stories on this site can boast any uniqueness in that sense.. we are all affected by the work we read and love, and that's great! more the merrier! xxx

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