by long_legs2u
An amazing beginning. It certainly pulled at my heart strings. I love the patriotism!
I posted part one and two on the same day, but so far only one part has popped up.
Hope you enjoy it and keep reading as I post more! (I've written 3 more chapters).
Started strongly setting the stage, good character base for the princess. Looking forward to the next chapter. Well done.
A good start. I can't wait to see where you take this. I really like that the princess is a bit of a tomboy.
Thanks for all the kind words. I posted part 3 and 4 today... so they should pop up here sometime before Christmas :) Nah, hopefully in about a week or two, if I judge the amount of time that it took the 1st part to be published (the second was submitted that same day and is still "pending").
It starts off with a first person narrator and then goes to third - you really can't do this, it spoiled it for me.
This has got the makings of a good series....can't wait! I love feisty females!
I've just finished chapter6... posted it along with 5 tonight so it should pop up within 2 weeks (still waiting for chap 3 and 4 to show up too)
Love the story.. love that she isn't just a weak defenseless princess and jealous of the fact that she's a proficient with a bow and arrow.. a talent I hope to gain myself
I just found this and I am so excited for more! Please keep
Up the good work!
In addition to the title, I can see the beginning of this sorry was also somewhat inspired by The Last Tritan. You seem to be a good writer, why not create a more unique premise.
our heroine has quite a responsibility on her shoulders, what with the honor of her family and country.. looking forward to reading more... i'm not bothered by the similarities to other stories like Last Tritan or The Priestess, this is quite a popular type of premise after all, and very few stories on this site can boast any uniqueness in that sense.. we are all affected by the work we read and love, and that's great! more the merrier! xxx