All Comments on 'The Last Stand at the Alamo'

Intriguing

A story with potential, and some lovely descriptions. Sweet lead up, the reader filling up with all manner of questions (marred by some over-used phrasings: 'noticeably firm breasts', 'nice bottom' etc. that suggest the writer is male.) The tension just getting going and delicious and then the tale kicks way too fast into way-past-speed-limit land. Stretch things out a bit more, give us a few (doesn't need to be a lot) more hints of the character's motivations and emotional history, and you got a great story on your hands.